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    Bonds of Shinobi IV

    Chapter 4: Shinobi Born


    A few weeks have passed since the relocation of the Uchiha clan. The village's mixed feelings about the decision made by the Hokage is shown within the council. Some say that the idea was brilliant while other say that they should have been expelled. However the thoughts that run through the Hokage's mind, after his encounter with Kagami makes him regret his decision, but not for the injustice it demonstrates...It haunts for a much more compelling reason.

    Mito “Tobirama-sama, we've received some new missions, well paying ones at that”

    Tobirama “What are they?”

    Mito “We'll there are a few assassination missions for missing-nin, and high class bandits...an important delivery, and an alliance mission, concerning a missing-nin from Sunagakure”

    Tobirama “I see...”

    Tobirama looks down on his desk during his conversation with Mito. On his left a scroll lays open and on his right the decree he signed ordering the relocation of the Uchiha clan.

    Mito “Tobirama-sama?”

    Tobirama “Forgive me Mito-chan, but I have something very perplexing on my mind at the moment. I have to take a walk, can I trust you to handle Misa and the missions for the moment?”

    Mito “Yes...(looks on the left side of his desk) Tobirama-sama”

    Tobirama rolls up the scroll and places it in his belt, with the label facing not being shown. He gets up and he walks past the kunoichi, who bares a look of worry on her face and leaves...On the outskirts of the village team Miyagi is engaged in a training session near a river with a large waterfall. Kagami, Shisui, and Tsubaki sit on rocks underneath the waterfall, as the heavy water showers aggressively down on them. What they now go through is the waterfall method.

    Miyagi “This training is to help you cloak yourself chakra. Through this you learn how to release chakra all throughout your body and you learn how to focus chakra outside different parts of your body simultaneously.”

    The faces and posture on each of the three shinobi demonstrates intense difficulty in this technique, and a lot of focus and chakra being used. The waterfall method of training is perhaps one of the most advanced chakra control training methods and is rarely used to teach genin.

    Tsubaki “Sensei...this...is embarrassing”

    Miyagi “What do you mean? Sitting on a rock is embarrassing to you?”

    Tsubaki “No...the fact that you had me off everything except my underwear”

    All three shinobi are stripped down of their cloths. Kagami and Shisui in their boxers while Tsubaki remains with her panties and bra.

    Miyagi “Oh that...the more clothes you have on the harder this technique is. You have good control Tsubaki but from what I'm seeing right now you're having some difficulty...besides you don't look half bad”

    Tsubaki “Sensei don't be a pervert~”

    Kagami “Both of you shut up this training is hard enough as it is without you two talking”

    Suddenly Kagami looses focus and control of his chakra. The chakra around him dispels and the heavy water rains down hard on him. A split second after Miyagi appears behind him on the rock and grabs takes him off. Kagami begins to cough and pant heavily.

    Miyagi “Lets take a break...kai!”

    The heavy waterfall lightens up revealing that Miyagi had used a jutsu to make the falls heavier on the three shinobi. Tsubaki and Shisui leap of the waterfall panting just as heavily as Kagami.

    Miyagi “Alright you three this is going to be our last step in our chakra control training. After this we're going to work on some jutsu”

    Tsubaki “What jutsu are you planning on teaching us?”

    Miyagi “Oh I'm not going to teach you any specific technique, you're going to have to find out what type of shinobi you are?”

    Tsubaki “What do you mean?!”

    Miyagi “It's quite simple, each shinobi has a fighting style; I fight with all ranges of ninjutsu, I have a high prowess for taijutsu, and I'm proficient enough in genjutsu to cast fairly strong illusions”

    Kagami “How is that all a fighting style, seems like you're making yourself out to be unbeatable”

    Miyagi “Well I guess you could call me a close ranged specialist. A shinobi needs to be well rounded and if I do say so myself I'm pretty much a well rounded shinobi (smiles)

    Shisui “So basically you're saying we should know how to do a little of everything?”

    Miyagi “Here's a little lesson. It's not the amount of jutsu or the level of jutsu you use but your ability to cover your weak points and exploit your opponents weak points that wins a battle. The shinobi academy is fairly new and since the ranks given are fairly new when I was registered as a shinobi here I was already a jounin. I can tell you however when I was younger and was beginning my training I started out as a close ranged taijutsu fighter with exceptional speed. I worked and trained on that for years to the point my mastery of my close range jutsu defined my general fighting style. There was one fight I was in when I was a teenager that would've resulted in my death had it not been for my father, saving me. The shinobi used long ranged ninjutsu and he was very good at keeping me out of range for my attacks. All that training I did was useless in that battle. My father came in, and he fought the same way as me, however when that shinobi used his jutsu my father was able to defend it with techniques I never knew he had.”

    Tsubaki “So your father really only used close ranged ninjutsu like you but he had long ranged attacks as a back up?”

    Miyagi “Exactly right. I've seen my father in countless fights, and sparing matches where he never needed anything other then his close ranged fighting, mainly because the shinobi he faced were of a lower level then him and fought within his range. However this one opponent was perhaps the strongest he'd ever fought and he demonstrated a whole new arsenal that I never knew he had and I came to view my father as an even greater shinobi then I had once believed”

    Kagami “It's safe to assume your father was a strong shinobi?”

    Miyagi “Let me put it another way...if there was a rank, between jounin and Kage my father would be in that category. He's much stronger then your average jounin but he's not yet as strong as a Kage”

    Shisui “What happened to him? Is he still alive?”

    Miyagi “No he's not. It happened about 5 or 6 years ago. Both me and my father were on a mission for the village, the ranking system not yet established.

    Kagami “What does rank have to do with it. You were a high level shinobi still back then right?”

    Miyagi “Yes but the reason I brought it up is because...I should have never been on that mission”

    Miyagi's cheerful look becomes serious and regretful looking and the three genin pay close attention to their sensei.

    Miyagi “Our mission was to assassinate a shinobi, who was part of a clan of shinobi who went around robbing and killing people. The shinobi was the leader of this clan and the village though that after he was killed we could do an autopsy and find out what his clan's secret abilities were...however what we didn't know was how powerful the shinobi was. What I said about the shinobi before I take back. The shinobi me and my father faced was the greatest match we had ever been in. I was taken out of commission in the beginning of the fight leaving just my father. My father took some blows and injuries that I had never seen before on him...however my father matched him at every turn...it wasn't until...the rest of his clan showed up. My father was overwhelmed and as I tried to help I only got in the way. I took a cut to the right arm that was immense and my father told me to get out. I tried to stay but the moment my father was able to distract them he made me leave. I reported everything and reinforcements were sent...they managed to finish the mission and ended up killing a majority of the clan but...they brought back my father in a body bag.”

    The shinobi look at their sensei and realize the pain he feels from the death of his father.

    Miyagi “There's five classifications for missions now; D-rank, C-rank, B-rank, A-rank, and S-rank. D are given to genin like you, C are given to chuunin, B are given to high level chuunin and jounin, A is given to jounin, and S are given to teams of jounin or exceptionally high ranking jounin. The mission we went on would've been a class S...”

    Tsubaki “Sensei...are you alright?”

    Miyagi's cheerfulness returns in a flash and he looks at his students with a warm smile.

    Miyagi “But I've gotten a lot stronger since then and I'm a little stronger then my dad was then. That's what crazy training will do for ya (laughs)

    the three shinobi crack a smile at their sensei attempting to move on from the subject.

    Miyagi “Back on the matter at hand. It's good to be well rounded but it's also good to have a signature that is all your own. I've told you about my special ability and from all the training we've done together I already have a general idea of what your fighting styles are, but I made a secret bet with myself so I'm not going to tell you. You're going to have to figure it out by yourselves. Once you do though I'll be able to help each of you develop those styles and we'll work together with each other and maybe come up with a team jutsu or formation”

    Tsubaki “How are we supposed to figure out what techniques work better for us?”

    Miyagi “Well study things you like. Try different things and whatever comes easier to you, you might want to stick with...alright that's enough time for a break back under the waterfall”

    Tsubaki “No way am I stripping down to my underwear again”

    Miyagi “You could strip completely naked, I mean it would make the technique easier for you”

    Tsubaki “Pervert!”

    Miyagi “I'm only joking Tsubaki-chan”

    Overhead a brown hawk circles over the shinobi and lets out it's call. Miyagi looks up and notices it realizing that it's a message of summoning.

    Miyagi “Actually it looks like the Hokage is summoning me for a mission. I guess that's if for today. You guys get the rest of the day off how fortunate”

    Tsubaki and the others sigh, a sigh of relief and their sensei leaves them. Miyagi heads to the Hokage residence while the three genin head back into the village to take some down time. Tsubaki lags behind her two comrades who walk side by side. The three remain silent for a long while, not uttering a word to one another. Tsubaki looks upon her two teammates. Her eyes see into their chakra and their feelings. She see's pain within both the hearts of her comrades and at the same time she sees an overwhelming negativity forming in both shinobi although she doesn't understand. The core of pureness that she once saw underneath all of Shisui's darkness has shrunk and the confusion she once saw in Kagami now seems more bitter and even more indecisive then ever. She looks at both of her teammates with different feelings however. Despite the negativity within both bodies she feels compassion for Kagami and overwhelming fear for Shisui, unable to see past the Kyuubi into his real heart.

    Shisui “Tsubaki-chan?”

    Tsubaki snaps out of her trans and notices that both Shisui and Kagami have stopped and have turn to her.

    Shisui “Is there something wrong?”

    Tsubaki “uhh...no nothing at all why do you ask?”

    Kagami “You're all the way back there, you're acting kind of strange”

    Tsubaki “Sorry, I'm just a little tired from the training is all (laughs untruthfully)

    The shinobi continue to walk in silence and when the reach the village, Shisui parts with them towards his dwelling. Kagami and Tsubaki head in the same direction, both of their homes being in the same general direction. As they walk through the village Tsubaki notices the cold stares and negative feelings of the villagers directed in their direction. Tsubaki looks around puzzled feeling outcast for some odd reason.

    Kagami “They're not looking at you”

    Tsubaki looks to Kagami who she notices is even tenser and slowly filling with more pain.

    Kagami “I'm the one who's grabbing their hate”

    Tsubaki “What do you mean...why would all these people...why would they be looking at you so coldly?”

    Kagami “Because of what that traitor did...because of Madara my whole clan has to deal with this isolation and now not even the Hokage trusts us”

    Tsubaki “Kagami-kun...”

    Kagami “That's why I decided to become the face of my clan. I will turn these cold looks back into looks of admiration and respect. I will become the strongest Uchiha, even more powerful then Madara-dono and I will show everybody just how powerful the Uchihas can be and how faithful they are to their village”

    Tsubaki “Kagami-kun...”

    Kagami “You look at me the same way Tsubaki. The reason you didn't stand next to me or Shisui, you felt the same way everybody else does, afraid.”

    Tsubaki “You're wrong I mean...it wasn't just because of anything like that”

    Kagami “Then what?!”

    Tsubaki “I felt kind of bad...I saw your chakra and I saw that you were...upset. You always seem distant during our training and...it's like you want to be away from the rest of us”

    Kagami “I'm sorry if I made you feel like you did anything wrong. To be honest I trust both you and Shisui with my life. You are perhaps the closest people to me...I'm just more of a solitary person”

    Tsubaki “You know...as a team it's best for us to get to know each other better. We help each other, that's what being on a team is all about”

    Kagami “How could you help me?”

    Tsubaki “(blushes) well...maybe...if we hung out more you could feel more comfortable talking to me about how you feel and I could better understand your pain...just as friends I mean”

    Kagami “I'm not much of an emotional person either, I'm a shinobi I'm supposed to keep a control on my feelings”

    Tsubaki “Sometimes in order to keep control you need to vent”

    Kagami “Tsubaki...thank you for showing that you're not like everybody else. You don't look at me like I'm a monster”

    Tsubaki “I never did...to be honest Kagami...the only reason I stayed away from you was because I felt worthless as a teammate to you and Shisui. You two are always protecting me and I saw such pain in you and I couldn't do anything about it. I couldn't...help you the way you helped me and~”

    Kagami “You'll blossom soon enough Tsubaki and until then...I'll still protect and help you...like you said that's what teammates do”

    Tsubaki blushes and looks at her teammate with a shy happiness. Kagami heads into the province where his clan has been sentenced too and above on the tori shows the Uchiha crest. As Tsubaki stands looking at Kagami as he walks away, she looks into him once more and sees a small glimmer of light emerge from deep inside him and even though it's small it's bright enough to stand out...At the Hokage residence Miyagi stands in front of desk with three shinobi sitting behind it, the mission assignment desk. Mito is leading the desk in assigning the missions to each shinobi. Miyagi holds a mission statement in his hands reading it over.

    Miyagi “This sounds pretty important. I'd feel better if there was somebody else going with me on such an important task. With two of us and the one shinobi guarding the scroll we'd have a better success rate”

    Mito “How are your students coming along?”

    Miyagi “Very well, they all have exceptional skills, beyond the scope of ordinary genin. I feel that they could be promoted to chuunin in a little under a year”

    Mito “So they're skills are above average you would say”

    Miyagi begins to understand what Mito is implying and his face turns serious.

    Miyagi “I'm not taking them on this mission”

    Mito “To be honest I expected you to bring them along.”

    Miyagi “This is a B-ranked mission, way outside of the scope of shinobi who are mere genin level. Exceptional or not this is a very difficult mission with a very high risk factor even for jounin. I have no frets about bringing another jounin or even a chuunin with me but not genin”

    Mito “We're really busy around the village, assigning shinobi to new posts, setting up facilities that require the advanced shinobi to look after in terms of preparation if we're to do things as smoothly as we want them to, not to mention the few missions we do have that have tied up the rest of our squads. Quit frankly there's not much option”

    Miyagi “Why not send any of the other genin teams? Why choose mine in particular?”

    Mito “For the very reason you stated...your team is the most advanced genin team in the whole village at this point. They've had ample time to train and knowing you and your heavy duty training, if they've done as well as you say they have they may just become chuunin even sooner?”

    Miyagi “We haven't had any battle training or formation training. We've only been through conditioning drills and chakra drills. They're resourceful in utilizing their chakra in unique ways but that's not enough if we're potentially going to up against mid and high level shinobi who have been properly trained in battle.”

    Mito “I know you have hang ups about things like this, sending lower level shinobi on higher ranking missions. I was told of what happened to your father during your mission”

    Miyagi “Then you can understand why I'm refusing to accept this”

    Mito “I myself don't feel that they should go, especially Shisui, given his situation, but this is crucial to Konoha's alliance with this village. This could bring more missions to the table meaning more money to fund our organizations and to rebuild Konoha. Soon we won't need to send low level genin on missions like this”

    Miyagi “But in order to do so we have to risk it right now with my team”

    Mito “Miyagi...this will be good for both you and them. This will give them a taste of the real world of the shinobi and it could help you in...letting go. Are you so incompetent in your abilities as a teacher to not believe you've taught them well enough to handle themselves fairly well in your abilities as a shinobi not to be able to protect them?”

    Miyagi takes the paper and begins leaving the room, before he does he turns his head partially towards Mito.

    Miyagi “I'll do it...but only this once”

    Miyagi leaves the room and Mito sighs and begins flipping through the other mission statements...In the Uchiha complex Kagami heads through looking at the rest of his clan. He sees the many homes, shops, and his clansmen. All of them organized into this ghetto and he notices the looks of frustration they have on their faces. The only few he sees without a care in the world are the innocent children who don't know of what kind of world they live in. As Kagami walks through, he heads to the Naka River in the back of the complex. When he arrives to the river he sees Tobirama sitting dead center in the river.

    Kagami “Hokage-sama what are you doing here?”

    Tobirama “I always come to this river to think...Before everything happened...before Konoha even I used to train here with my water techniques”

    Kagami “I've heard rumors about your skills saying that you could create your own sea only using the water molecules in the atmosphere...”

    Tobirama “(closes eyes and laughs), well even so, remember every great shinobi starts out as a novice at one point or another...this river provides me with something more then just training...It allows me to clear my head and confess everything”

    Kagami “Like what?”

    Tobirama “(stands up and walks off the river) Like the guilt I have about sentencing you and your clan here. I looked at the children in your clan...not a thought in the world about anything except the here and now...just fun and innocent. They're the only ones who aren't hurt by this...not yet...Also...”

    Tobirama pauses for a moment and turns his head away from Kagami feeling guilt for what he's about to say.

    Tobirama “I realized that you were right Kagami...I didn't trust you or your clan they way I should. Although I tried to defend your rights I felt deep down...a little fear because of what happened to my brother.”

    Kagami “So why are you here then? Just to tell us that?!”

    Tobirama “No...to apologize to you and the rest of your clan...I realized that you were the ones who really suffered. You were betrayed along with the rest of Konoha and by those you held closest. You've all lost somebody or some people that were close to you because of what they did...however instead of joining them you all showed loyalty to Konoha above your loved ones and you stuck by our side...For you and your clansmen were dealt the worst blow by the ones you loved...I of all people should have understood that.”

    Kagami looks a his leader speechless.

    Tobirama “You're parents...they were involved weren't they...I remember seeing them amongst the others~”

    Kagami “I don't care...As far as I'm concerned they're a disgrace to me and the clan. I have no pride in being their son. All I want to do is to become an Uchiha that will earn the respect of Konoha back. I will become even stronger then Madara-dono and protect Konoha”

    Tobirama “And when you do, you may very well become Hokage one day Kagami”

    Tobirama leaves the boy to his thoughts and Kagami is filled with a little more respect for Tobirama. Overhead Kagami sees a hawk circling above him and he answers the call and heads to the main gates of Konoha. Once he arrives he sees Tsubaki, Shisui, and Miyagi waiting for him.

    Kagami “So it turns out that this mission was for the whole team huh sensei?”

    Miyagi “Yes...Before we start I'm going to explain to you the details of this particularly important mission. The Land of Valley's is starting up a new village known as Tanigakure (Land of Rivers), and one of the founding clans has decided to split their clan in two, with one section of the clan remaining behind in the country outside of the confines of the village, for security reasons concerning their clan's secret jutsu. The clan's original location is a secret and has been hidden for many generations without a soul, outside of the clan ever finding out its location. The current leader of the clan however wants the technique scroll for their most powerful jutsu to remain in the hands of the village and so the clan is sending a messenger shinobi to deliver it to the village. Our mission is to guard that shinobi on their way to deliver this scroll to the village.”

    Shisui “Why do we need to help escort the shinobi?”

    Miyagi “The Kamisori clan (Razor Family) is renown for their hidden techniques. They're clan's location may be a secret but the power their hidden techniques possess is no secret. The Kamisori clan also had a lot of enemies in the Land of Valleys and since Tanigakure is young they have yet to assimilate all the clans within the country”

    Tsubaki “Assimilate?”

    Miyagi “In this day and age, when a shinobi nation is started by a country, their main concern is gaining power fast. Once the village is set up the country and village has all rights to the country's inhabitants. The Daimyou with the normal residence in their country and the shinobi village dealing with the inhabitants of their village and...that of shinobi clans outside of the village. A shinobi village will go through a phase of assimilation, where clans of shinobi are sought out and offered to join the village...The clan will then have one of three choices: accept and become part of the village, decline and leave the country peacefully, or decline and stay and face the military might of the village to either eradicate them or force them out of the village”

    Tsubaki “That's horrible”

    Kagami “It's just how things are. The Senju and Uchiha clans were the founding clans and when Konoha set up they sent out and did the same thing. The trio clans; Yaminaka, Nara, and Akimichi accepted, as well as the Hyuuga, Inuzuka, Aburame, and Sarutobi. It's a military strategy”

    Shisui “So we're just insurance in case the shinobi is attacked and the scroll is stolen?”

    Tsubaki “That seems pretty high class doesn't it sensei?”

    Miyagi “I know...it's a B-ranked mission”

    Tsubaki “But sensei, we're only genin we should only be on D-ranked~”

    Miyagi “I know but with all the new organizations being set up around the village the only available teams are genin teams like us and the mission desk decided to send us sense they believed we were the best team”

    Kagami “It doesn't make a difference to me”

    Shisui “If we're the only team that can do it then I guess we don't have much choice”

    Miyagi “Listen to me all of you”

    Miyagi remains in a serious mood and looks at all three of his students.

    Miyagi “I will protect you all with my life, but the moment things get to heated you I want you guys to get out of there do you understand?”

    Tsubaki “But sensei~”

    Miyagi “Is that understood? The moment I tell you to get out of there you listen to me and keep going and don't look back”

    The three shinobi nod reluctantly agreeing to their sensei. With those final words said the shinobi begin their departure heading towards the Land of Valleys to meet up with the shinobi messenger.
    Several Hours Pass (Late Afternoon)
    The four shinobi arrive at the rendezvous in the Land of Valleys by late afternoon. A few minutes after they arrive a shinobi comes out of the bushes and greets them. He's a young shinobi in his late teens baring the symbol of his new village.

    Kou “You must be the Konoha shinobi here to help with my mission”

    Miyagi “Yes. I am Miyagi Kotetsu, to my left are my students, Shisui Uzumaki, Tsubaki Tsuchi, and Kagami Uchiha”

    Kou “I heard Konoha was understaffed with shinobi but I didn't realize that it was like this, sending genin on such a mission like this”

    Kagami “Don't underestimate us”

    Miyagi “I apologize for this but I assure you, these are the strongest genin in our village and we have the strongest team. We will complete this mission”

    The shinobi nods and the five of them set out towards Tanigakure. As they start their trek to the village overhead in the sky an eye opens up and looks down at the five shinobi. In the distance a shinobi sits with his eyes closed with the ram seal meditating and maintaining his genjutsu.

    Taiki “Four shinobi have joined him”

    A “Well who are they?”

    Taiki “They appear to be shinobi from Konoha...but from what it looks like only one of them poses a threat, the others are low level, probably genin. They're just kids”

    B “Well that's not very challenging. I was expecting more of a fight”

    Taiki “It doesn't matter, it just makes our job easier. We'll complete our mission and find out the Kamisori clan's secret techniques...lets go”

    The shinobi opens his eyes and it is revealed that the shinobi is blind. He stands up and behind him three shinobi stand; two twins and a large muscular man. They head out and begin their pursuit of the 5 shinobi...After several minutes Miyagi calls the convoy to a stop in a fairly wide space within the forest and calls out the four shinobi trailing them.

    C “Guess he found us out”

    The four shinobi leap down in front of the shinobi, revealing themselves. Miyagi's look intensifies knowing a battle is inevitable. He clinches his fist and looks at the the shinobi.

    Taiki “How did you find us out?”

    Miyagi “The moment you used that genjutsu to track us”

    Taiki “Your chakra...it feels strong”

    Tsubaki “*he's a sensor like me*”

    A “Taiki-san that guy is a Kotetsu”

    Taiki “Really...I've heard stories of the Kotetsu shinobi, never did I expect to fight one in my lifetime”

    Miyagi “Listen you three, I'm going to make a distraction for you. Take Kou and continue heading towards the village”

    Kagami “Sensei it's four on one~”

    Miyagi “I've taken much larger number just do as I say”

    Suddenly the blind shinobi appears in between all five shinobi and lunges a kunai at Miyagi. Without turning around Miyagi side steps the shinobi, grabs his arm and places a kunai at the neck of the shinobi, who in turn grabs Miyagi's wrist before it impacts. The other four shinobi back away after they realize what had happened. The large shinobi appears behind Kou and proceeds to slam down a large fist down on the shinobi. He leaps up and evades the fist and the shinobi (C ) creates a crater in the ground. C continues to Kou attempting to get the scroll on his belt. The last two shinobi (A and B) walk up behind the genin and get their attention. They all take out a kunai and get on guard and Kagami activates his Sharingan.

    B “Ah an Uchiha, this may be fun after all”

    Miyagi “*shit I can't handle all of them by myself, this guy is fast enough to keep up with me if I can take him down first maybe I can get to the others before anything happens and they can get out*”

    Taiki “Neither of us are going to complete our goals standing like this. I suggest you do something”

    Both shinobi back up out of their stalemate and look at each other. Miyagi studies every slight movement in the shinobi's body and observes minor details. Taiki moves his left foot slightly and Miyagi begins making rapid hand seals and he leaps back. Multiple shuriken and kunai rush at Miyagi as he leaps up.

    Miyagi “Suiton: Suijinheki (Water Release: Water Encampment Wall)”

    Miyagi spits out a fairly large amount of water from his mouth and it creates a wall washing away all the projectiles. The shinobi appears behind Miyagi and he attempts to kick. Miyagi grabs the Taiki's leg and throws him down to the ground and before the shinobi could get up Miyagi was on top of him with a kunai directly in his chest. The shinobi appeared dead but a seal appears on the body and the body electrifies. Realizing it's a trap Miyagi tries to leap back but he's caught in the electric field. The blind shinobi appears walking towards Miyagi, caught in his trap but he suddenly stops.

    Taiki “The rumors of your family's speed are true”

    A kunai is pressed against Taiki's neck and behind him stands Miyagi. Miyagi stares intensely at the shinobi who stands nonchalantly.

    Taiki “You made a shadow clone the moment you realized I had made a trap clone of myself and sent him down instead...impressive”

    Miyagi “Why do you want this scroll?”

    Taiki “That's our business I'm afraid”

    Miyagi leaps back away from Taiki suddenly. In the palm of Taiki's hand there is a paper bomb, Taiki tried to place on Miyagi's leg, a mere instant after Taiki's last statement. Miyagi places up his guard and Taiki turns around and looks into the eyes of Miyagi, reading his chakra with his blind eyes. The shinobi fighting Kou proves to be a most admirable fighter. The shinobi is fast however not as fast as his leader and his two other teammates. Kou manages to keep up with his movements but just enough to get out of the way of his attacks.

    Kou "(Panting) *this is ridiculous, my taijutsu won't work on this guy, it's like hitting a brick wall*”

    C “The scroll is all I want give it to me and you won't have to die”

    Kou “I only have one change”

    Kou makes a few quick seals and places his hand on the ground

    Kou “Kuchiyose no Jutsu! (Summoning Technique)”

    A black crow is summoned on the ground in front of the shinobi and it latches on to his shoulder. C looks at Kou confused and then suddenly gets up close to him and swings his fist. Kou jumps, with the bird still on his back. Kou lands in a tree and he uses a type of sign language to the bird. The bird gets off his shoulder and gets in front of him. Kou makes the tiger seal and the crow increases in size massively. He makes the snake and ox seal and suddenly the crow transforms into a giant shuriken. Kou jumps through the whole of the shuriken and grabs onto it and lands in front of C.

    C “You're making this harder then it has to be. That weapon's not going to help you one bit”

    Kou stares at the rough looking shinobi. Using both hands he launches the shuriken at the shinobi and C evades it.

    C “You are powerful if you can launch such a weapon with that kind of speed but not as strong as me”

    C heads to Kou with great speed and Kou cracks a small smile. C looks confused and suddenly he hears the screech of the crow and his eyes widen with shock. He looks behind him and sees the shuriken spiraling towards him. He stops short of his attack and jumps up. The shuriken stops in front of Kou and then shoots up towards C. C uses both hands to hammer down the shuriken when it gets close to him and it goes crashing into the ground. C lands and away from Kou and the shuriken and he sees the feet of the crow extend out of the shuriken pulling itself from the ground and he sees the eyes appear on the shuriken.

    C “That is a very unique technique”

    B, from the two twins looks over to C and notices his problem with his opponent. He smiles and nudges his brother who holds Shisui with one hand by the collar.

    B “I wish I had fought that guy, he would've made some good competition”

    A “He's our only target, these runts are insignificant. We'll help C the moment we finish with them”

    Shuriken go flying towards the back of A and B. The shuriken are aimed perfectly at their heads however, without turning around B raises his blade and deflects all the shuriken. B turns around and sees Kagami with his Sharingan panting rather heavily. A lets go of Shisui and before he reaches the ground he kicks him straight into Kagami. Kagami leaps to avoid being hit by Shisui and takes out six kunai. Tsubaki catches Shisui and Kagami releases his kunai. Again they're deflected off of the two shinobi's blades, however Kagami swings both his hands back, revealing trick wire at the ends of his fingertips, connected to the kunai. He swings his hands around wrapping the shinobi in the wire and Kagami lands. Kagami begins making seals but the both shinobi angle their blades with their free wrist and cut through the wire like butter. Kagami stops his seals and ducks, as A appears behind him and swings his blade. B comes up under Kagami and launches a kick, but is caught by Kagami. Kagami sweeps the leg of B and tries to land a punch on him. A places his blade in between Kagami's fist and his brother causing Kagami to hit the blade. B puts one hand on the ground to maintain his balance and swings his blade to stab Kagami. The moment the blade enters Kagami a block of wood replaces it. Kagami used the Substitution jutsu and appeared next to his teammates. A and B get up and look at the three shinobi.

    Kagami “*This new Sharingan is amazing, I can see their attacks clearly now, but if they stay together I can't pull off an attack...I have to find a way to separate them then I can take them out one at a time*”

    A “We're going to need to be in sync if we're going to kill do this”

    B “Don't ruin my fun how often to I get to fight an Uchiha, even if he's a kid”

    A “we need that scroll”

    The bout between Kou and C wages on. Kou takes the offensive now, attacking C with a high level of taijutsu. The combination of taijutsu and the giant shuriken allow Kou to take the offensive in the battle while C plays defensive. He blocks Kou's attacks with not problem but he's excreting a lot of energy to evade and deflect the giant crow shuriken.

    C “Enough!”

    C blocks an oncoming kick from Kou and forces him back. Just as the crow shuriken races towards him from the back, he turns and grabs it. He slides back trying due to the power generated from the speed and size of the shuriken but he manages to hold it between his arms. He slams the shuriken into the ground embedding it. The crow tries to get out but he's too deep in the ground. Kou rushes towards C but he merely back fists him sending him crashing into a tree. Kou tries to get up but he feels a powerful pain in his right side. From that one punch most of he ribs on Kou's right side had been broken. C walks toward Kou and Kou pants heavily. C reaches for the scroll and at that moment Kou grabs onto his arm trying to prevent him from taking the scroll.

    C “Pathetic, you've been defeated accept it. You're lucky I decided to let you live”

    Kou “Arrogant bastard...(smiles) look behind you”

    C's eyes widen and he sees he can hear the spiraling of the shuriken behind him. He looks behind him and tries to move however Kou holds on to his arm tight. A second later the shuriken cuts C clean in two and a split second after that the shuriken turns back into a small crow and gets on Kou's lap.

    Kou “(pats the bird's head) good boy”

    The summon disappears and and blood rapidly spills out of C's severed two pieces.

    A “You idiot this is your fault”

    B “What are you talking about C shouldn't have been so stupid”

    A “Just shut up and get the scroll I'll finish this”

    B does what his brother asks and he heads towards the scroll. Kagami's eyes widen with the sudden realization of opportunity.

    Kagami “*Now's my chance*”

    Kagami takes out a kunai but and prepares to execute a plan, and he see's A's movements and prepares himself. At that moment A disappeared and the sound of blades clashing behind him turns his widened eyed expression from opportunity bound, to complete confusion and shock. He turns to see Shisui holding a kunai to A's sword behind him.

    Kagami “*But...how?...I saw him, I knew he was going to be there but how did he...”
     
         

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    A strikes Shisui in the stomach and throws him aside. Kagami is paralyzed with shock and confusion as to how the shinobi moved so fast, but also how he wasn't able to keep up with him. He goes for Kagami but two shuriken shoot towards his back, thrown by Tsubaki. He blocks them and heads to her instead. He knocks her out without any trouble and takes her between his arm.

    B “I got the scroll, the kid didn't put up much of a fight for it so I didn't kill him...what's with the girl”

    A “Leverage, Taiki is having problems with that shinobi, and I'm sure now that C's dead and the fact that that shinobi could keep up with him, means he could possibly keep up with us despite being in the state he's in. We need a new plan”

    Kagami soon snaps himself out of it and sees Tsubaki in trouble and Shisui unconscious. He runs towards them but the same thing happens. He see's B's attack coming but he gets behind him too fast to do anything about it, and B knocks him out, hitting him on the neck. Kagami remains conscious for a moment and tries to get up to go after Tsubaki but he can't...A and B regroup with Taiki and Miyagi backs up. Miyagi sees Tsubaki in the arms of one of the shinobi and his eyes widen in fear. He looks over to see Kagami and Shisui passed out, the other shinobi injured but he also sees the other shinobi he was fighting, cut in two. A whispers into his leader's ear.

    Taiki “So that's why I'm sensed his chakra split in two, oh well, you're right splitting up will be benificial. Give me the scroll and I'll take it back to the clan, you take the girl. If I know anything about Konoha shinobi they're weak when it comes to this situation...which will you choose Kotetsu? Your student or your mission?”

    A and B head out with Tsubaki, while Taiki heads to his clan. Miyagi clinches his fist and heads over to Shisui and Kagami. He brings them too and then heads over to Kou.

    Kou “My ribs...they're broken I can't fight anymore...I failed my mission”

    Miyagi “This mission isn't over yet, just stay here, we'll be back for you”

    Kagami “Sensei, they took Tsubaki, and another thing...I think they have some special ability...to make my reaction time slower when I...”

    Miyagi “It's not a trick they're just faster then you...One of the weaknesses of your jutsu is, that your eyes and your body react at different times. Your eyes can see what they're going to do but your body won't respond fast enough, unless you are up to speed with your opponents”

    Kagami “But...how can~”

    Miyagi “Listen to me, you and Shisui have to go after Tsubaki. You have to find a way to hold those guys off until I can come back with the scroll”

    Shisui “Yes sensei”

    Kagami “Where are you going?”

    Miyagi “This mission is important to our village I have to go get the scroll...I know these opponents are tough but I'm only asking you to stall them until I can catch up with you. The shinobi I'm going after is fast and he's very skilled, I just can't afford to hold back anymore. Even if I have to used most of my chakra I will get to you three and help you. Just hold them until I get there”

    Kagami and Shisui nod and the three shinobi head out. Kou is left alone and he still pants heavily. He manages to make a few seals and summons his crow back. He pulls out a piece of paper and pen and writes a note and attaches it to the leg of the crow.

    Kou “Bring...this to Tani. Tell them we need help”

    The crow flies away in the direction of Tanigakure and Kou leans up against a tree holding his side. As the crow heads to Tani, the sun completely sets and night falls in. After several minutes both Miyagi and his genin catch up to their opponents and begin to engage them in battle.

    Taiki “I see you decided to choose the mission over your comrades, never did I expect you to send the other two to the slaughter as well”

    Miyagi “They're strong enough to hold their own against your followers”

    Taiki “(laughs) is that what you think. You think A and B were actually trying to kill them? Oh I was really hoping you were smarter then that”

    Miyagi's eyes widen and he begins contemplating heading for his students although in a second Miyagi begins feeling a fuzzy sensation in his mind and everything begins to fade into complete and utter darkness.

    Miyagi “Shit genjutsu, and I fell right into it”

    Miyagi takes out a kunai and in front of him he blocks two projectile items however he's cut on his left leg and his right shoulder. More slashes come his way and he manages to block most of them but he's unable to block the others. He can't see Taiki in this world of darkness, and therefore his perceptional abilities are nullified and he only has brief split seconds to defend against the onslaught.

    Miyagi “*Kokuangyo no Jutsu (Bringer-of-Darkness Technique)...A simple release won't do anything against such a powerful technique...I'm a sitting duck*”

    Over at opposite end where Shisui and Kagami square off against A and B, they face worse problems. Shisui demonstrates an excellent amount of skill in taijutsu and his speed, is up to par with Kagami's however the fact of the matter is both genin are still no match for the twin swordsmen together. Tsubaki lay tied up to a tree and she remains out cold. For the moment the twins play with Shisui and Kagami. Kagami and Shisui fight using the highest level of their speed just to defend themselves against the two shinobi. Kagami's Sharingan gives him an advantage however it doesn't do anything for him.

    B “How do you ever expect to help your friend if you can't even hit us. What a joke I though the Uchihas were better then this(laughs)

    Kagami “SHUT YOUR DAMN MOUTH!”

    A pulse sensation hits Kagami and all of a sudden he appears behind B, slashing him across the back. It was as if Kagami's speed, and abilities skyrocketed upwards at that moment. B leaps back and looks at Kagami angrily.

    A “You idiot, you're going to get yourself killed like that”

    B “I'm going to kill that kid now”

    B gets behind him, using all his speed and cuts him. Like before he uses the substitution jutsu, but this time he appears above him. Kagami makes lightning quick seals.

    Kagami “Katon: Gokakyuu no Jutsu (Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique)”

    Kagami spits a large ball of fire down at B and it crashes down on him. After the smoke clears Kagami pants, as his burst of sudden energy fades away. The smoke clears and A stands in front of his brother and his skin is dark and hard. He sees the hard exterior of the shinobi begin to fade and Kagami looks and sees the jutsu

    Kagami “*Damn...he blocked my technique with earth style*”

    Note: Doton: Domu (Earth Release: Earth Spear technique)

    Although he's out of breath Kagami smiles. He looks and sees that Shisui has managed to free Tsubaki. B (who came out unharmed) rushes over to Shisui to attack him. Kagami throws a kunai but A holds out his arm, using the Earth Spear technique only on his arm. In an instant he appears behind Kagami.

    A “You're not going to interfere anymore”

    He lunges his hand towards Kagami's heart, but Kagami manages to move out of the general direction. Kagami is caught on the right shoulder. A's hand goes right through it and blood begins spilling out. He kicks the child off his arm an picks him up by the neck. At that moment Shisui sees Kagami helpless, B appears in front of him and lunges a punch towards him. Shisui blocks the punch and flips the shinobi over his shoulder. B reverses the hold and cuts Shisui across the chest and throws him.

    B “Alright I'm starting to get annoyed of you little brats. Just for this I'm going to kill your little girlfriend right now!”

    Shisui looks in fear. Kagami is about to be struck down as well as Tsubaki. A pulse sensation hits Shisui and Shisui yells out of pain and fear. A burst of red chakra energy erupts out of Shisui and both A and B look in fear at the shinobi.

    A “What is that?!”

    B “That kid, just what kind of power?”

    Shisui's yells increase, his canines begin to get longer and sharper and the nails on his hands and feet get longer. His eyes turn from brown to red and they turn demonic. The chakra spirals out of him more and more, and in the air above him, where all the chakra gathers a face of a menacing fox appears. Taiki goes to attack Miyagi in their battle when he suddenly feels the chakra of Shisui and he stops his attack frozen by the amount of chakra he senses.

    Taiki “The power of this chakra...It can't be human”

    Miyagi hears Taiki speaking of the intense chakra he feels and Miyagi immediately knows what has happened.

    Miyagi “*No, not now...Damn I can't waste my chakra but the only way to get to them is if I use that jutsu...If I don't hurry...Shisui could kill Tsubaki and Kagami*”

    Miyagi takes his kunai and stabs directly down into his stomach and he's released from the genjutsu. Taiki returns his focus to Miyagi and Miyagi's look is even more intense then before.

    Miyagi “I'm done messing with you. You're going to die now!”

    Miyagi makes the five seals and gets ready to preform the jutsu he used in the fight against the Uchihas. Miyagi's eyes meet Taiki's and despite being blind Taiki feels a menacing stare coming from the shinobi.

    Miyagi “Kobura Tsume (Cobra's Claw)”
    In Konoha
    While battles plays out in the Land of Valleys, in the quiet serenity seems at peace under the night's sky, illuminated by the light of the moon. However the things that seem most calm are perhaps the most terrifying.

    ??? “You three have your assignments now go”

    A body, concealed under the shadows, orders three shinobi dressed entirely in black garb to a secret mission, in the back forests of Konoha. The three shinobi comply with their commander and head out. As they head closer and closer into the village the Hokage residence is in sight. The three shinobi stop, concealing themselves in the trees above and they look down and see Tobirama walking towards his residence. The shinobi take out their swords and shuriken quietly and unleash them onto the unsuspecting Hokage. Tobirama evades the shuriken and orders the shinobi to come out of their hiding. The three shinobi leap down from the trees with their swords in hands and look at Tobirama.

    Tobirama “What do you want from me? Who are you”

    Shinobi 1 “Who we are are none of your concern”

    Shinobi 2 “We have been sent to kill you Nidaime-sama”

    Shinobi 3 “And that we shall”

    Tobirama “You came...to kill me (smile cynically) that's all I needed to hear”

    Suddenly he transforms and the three shinobi react surprised to see Love in the Hokage's place.

    Shinobi 1 “A trap?!”

    Shinobi 2 “But how did he know about~”

    Love “You're all too predictable, even more so now. I didn't expect it so soon, but actually this is perfect timing”

    The three shinobi throw multiple shuriken at Love, but he deflects them off his blade. One of the shinobi gets behind Love with lightning speed and the two clash blade. One of the other shinobi gets to Love's rear and attempts to strike him. Love forces the one shinobi off and he evades the strike of the other shinobi and counters with a slash to the stomach. Suddenly the shinobi fades and Love is bound up in chains and pinned with stakes. In his body.

    Love “Genjutsu?”

    Shinobi 1 “We'll complete our mission regardless of you~”

    Love “Pathetic truly pathetic”

    The shinobi suddenly drops dead and the other two notice Love behind their fallen comrade.

    Shinobi 2 “What?! But that was our collaboration genjutsu technique strongest in our~”

    Love “If that's you're strongest technique, you had no business going after the Hokage. Honestly sending mice to take down a lion, and when I thought you people were smart”

    The second shinobi goes down and the last shinobi see's Love behind his other comrade. Love's speed rivals that of Miyagi.

    Shinobi 3 “How did you break our technique?”

    Love “(sigh) guess I can tell you...it helps...to know what your opponents going to do (looks up revealing two Sharingan in his eyes)...before they do it”

    The last shinobi widens his eyes and he's struck down, an instant after. Love holds his eyes after that showing in pain, which reveals that his abilities with his newly obtained eyes haven't been fully mastered yet. Love takes the bodies and ties them up with wire and heads to the Hokage residence. He enters undetected, except for Tobirama who realizes immediately. Love enters Tobirama's privet study and sees him reading.

    Tobirama “What are you doing here?”

    Love “I came to drop something off for you...you know for your research”

    Tobirama clinches his fist as Love enters with two bodies and throws them on the floor in front of Tobirama.

    Tobirama “Love what is the meaning of this?!”

    Love “Assassins, sent to kill you”

    Tobirama “What?”

    Love “I know you have your suspicions...I had the same ones and this just confirmed what we both were thinking. Unlike you though Nidaime-sama, I wasn't afraid to tail them and find everything out before things got...too serious”

    Tobirama “Mito~”

    Love “Nidaime-sama, think about this for a minute...they were after you, and the only thing is that I took them down for you without you having to get your hands dirty and keeping you in the dark away from their suspicion. They'll figure out it was men and being the mysterious man that I am they'll focus on me just as they do you. If you have Mito take these bodies away and start an investigation you'll never have any privet time to do your research, which I'm all for by the way. Just take these two do what you need to with them and everything will go back to they way they were.”

    Tobirama “You're worse then Danzo”

    Love “Thank you”

    Love leaves and leaves the two dead bodies. Tobirama gets up and unmasks the two shinobi and his eyes intensify.

    Tobirama “So...I was right...Tenzou”

    Tenzou drops in out of nowhere and kneels before the Hokage.

    Tenzou “Yes, Nidaime-sama”

    Tobirama “Take these two bodies and place them in the lab underground and have two squads guard them...also place another two squads on that mission 1”

    Tenzou “Two more Nidaime?”

    Tobirama “Yes”

    Tenzou “Very well my Lord”

    Tenzou slings one shinobi over his shoulder and holds the other between his left arm and makes the tiger seal. He disappears and Mito enters shortly after.

    Mito “Tobirama-sama, did you summon me?”

    Tobirama “No...I have everything under control now”

    Mito “I see...good night then”

    Mito leaves and Tobirama heads back to his desk and he rolls up his scroll with the label “Resurrection” on it and sits pondering.

    Tobirama “*Danzo on the council...Love in the black...I have Danzo but now Love is...He knows about me, and he knows how to hide better then Danzo...damn it how can I protect Konoha if I can't defeat those on the inside...Hashi, how would you handle this?*”

    A shinobi's best friend is night and the darkness. It is during this time that a shinobi's attacks are most fatal. Love revealed only two of the three bodies that attempted to assassinate Tobirama, not to mention he possesses the Sharingan, and knows details about Tobirama that have been hidden even from Tobi's most trusted assistant. When a shinobi becomes the night that aids him so well, he becomes damn near invincible... In the debt of this night, Team Miyagi faces perhaps it's darkest moment yet, while Tobirama begins a fight against a shinobi who has become the night itself.

    To Be Continued...

    Previous
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=83737- Bonds of Shinobi
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=84747- Bonds of Shinobi II
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=85557- Bonds of Shinobi III

    Following
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=89142- Bonds of Shinobi V
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=90365- Bonds of Shinobi VI
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=91168- Bonds of Shinobi VII
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=92360- Bonds of Shinobi VIII
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=93293- Bonds of Shinobi IX
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=94088- Bonds of Shinobi X
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=95450- Bonds of Shinobi XI
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=97049- Bonds of Shinobi XII
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=98256- Bonds of Shinobi XIII

    I know this is Hella long, just look I had to make a second part for it to fit lol. I know it's been a while since my last one (for those of you who read this series) reasons for this being; I was in a writting slump for the first week with this chapter, and then I decided to make it a double release and release my fifth chapter (which I'm going to do either later today or early tomorrow) so I needed time to work on that. I finished my fifth chapter and now about four days ago but saturday, sunday, and half of monday I was at Six Flags havin a hell of a time lol. So here's my chapter four and I'll update my previous chapters on here and bring out chapter five later. Hope you enjoy this one I had a lot of help from Naruto Kyuubi on this one so thank him too.
     
         
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    Re: Bonds of Shinobi IV

    hey dude you didnt need to thank me you know... and anyway love is a uchicha? i didnt see that coming and one more question i want to create a jutsu say "divine punishment" what will be the jap name for it
     
         

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    Re: Bonds of Shinobi IV

    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    hey dude you didnt need to thank me you know... and anyway love is a uchicha? i didnt see that coming and one more question i want to create a jutsu say "divine punishment" what will be the jap name for it
    Tenrai Kei (When I create my own jutsu I tend to use the Japese dictionary and it usually has a couple different names used for the words, meaning some may have a different literal meaning but I just pick the ones that sound the best for a jutsu. Cannon jutsu I get off the Wiki).

    I like to give credit where credit is due, I don't mind sharing it, also how do you think this one came out? I mean due to my slump it kind of felt iffy and it seems too long.
     
         

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    i gave rep not because ur my friend i really liked the story specially the character portrayal to me a fight means nothing but making a character flesh and blood is a lot more important.ofcourse it was long but its ok for me but for the rest i dont know
     
         

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    Re: Bonds of Shinobi IV

    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    i gave rep not because ur my friend i really liked the story specially the character portrayal to me a fight means nothing but making a character flesh and blood is a lot more important.ofcourse it was long but its ok for me but for the rest i dont know
    Thanks for the rep and thanks for the input.
     
         

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    i have a suggestion for you,try using colours in the texts otherwise it may appear monotonus to some
     
         

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    Re: Bonds of Shinobi IV

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    i have a suggestion for you,try using colours in the texts otherwise it may appear monotonus to some
    I'll try it on the sixth chapter because my Fifth is too much to edit at this point but I'll take note, this is a really long series of chapters.
     
         

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    I'll try it on the sixth chapter because my Fifth is too much to edit at this point but I'll take note, this is a really long series of chapters.
    yeah i can see that meaning may be i will have to write two ffs by then before u end urs and we start the group project
     
         

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    yeah i can see that meaning may be i will have to write two ffs by then before u end urs and we start the group project
    We can start whenever. My series is kind of long, I have hella things that I need to explain from the previous chapters in the following ones and a few other topics that need to be introduce to complete the series...I'm thinking about a total of around 14 chaps.
     
         

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    We can start whenever. My series is kind of long, I have hella things that I need to explain from the previous chapters in the following ones and a few other topics that need to be introduce to complete the series...I'm thinking about a total of around 14 chaps.
    that wont be a problem for me my own ff will drag for say 8 chaps and then i can either sit duck or try another one until ur job is done or if u want we can start after i finish mine,but it would be better if we finish our respective projects first
     
         

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    AwesomenessD

    For some reason, every time Love is mentioned, i end up visualizing Guy O_o and now im seeing Guy with the Sharingan. O_o o_O
    But you have indeed turned Love into a Dark and Twisted character. After he ditched Danzou, i thought you made him into a all out Good guy. Looking forward to how he turns out and what kind of impact he'll have later on. :

    Some how i knew that we'd get a glimpse of the Kyuubi
    i liked how you rendered Kagami helpless there for a moment. But i'd like to see him and Shisui collaborating in fights, do that and describe it well, and i could easily visualize a episode

    Can i suggest that when you are describing things, that you put it in Bold ? It would be easier to tell the difference between someone talking and you simply describing the scenery/fight.

    Bring On Chapter 5 !
     
         

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    AwesomenessD

    For some reason, every time Love is mentioned, i end up visualizing Guy O_o and now im seeing Guy with the Sharingan. O_o o_O
    But you have indeed turned Love into a Dark and Twisted character. After he ditched Danzou, i thought you made him into a all out Good guy. Looking forward to how he turns out and what kind of impact he'll have later on. :

    Some how i knew that we'd get a glimpse of the Kyuubi
    i liked how you rendered Kagami helpless there for a moment. But i'd like to see him and Shisui collaborating in fights, do that and describe it well, and i could easily visualize a episode

    Can i suggest that when you are describing things, that you put it in Bold ? It would be easier to tell the difference between someone talking and you simply describing the scenery/fight.

    Bring On Chapter 5 !
    Thanks a lot. I just posted chapter five but like this one I had to make another post under it (actually two) and they're under some other comments that people already made before I could put them together so just keep doing down it's not that far thankfully but whenever you get time you can read it. Thanks for the comment.
     
         

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    Thanks a lot. I just posted chapter five but like this one I had to make another post under it (actually two) and they're under some other comments that people already made before I could put them together so just keep doing down it's not that far thankfully but whenever you get time you can read it. Thanks for the comment.
    Oh wow. I just had a look at the thread, my word does that look like a long read.
    I'll get to it tommorow and leave a comment.
     
         

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    Oh wow. I just had a look at the thread, my word does that look like a long read.
    I'll get to it tommorow and leave a comment.
    Yeah I promise to make my next chapters shorter (I'll try to keep them within one post, or a post and a half, my fifth chapter was hella long, the longest of my chapters. I really appriciate anybody who sits down and gives a damn enough to read all of that. Thank you for keeping up with my series lol)
     
         

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    You and Naruto Kyuubi did a good job.

    Quote Originally Posted by abysmal14 View Post
    AwesomenessD

    For some reason, every time Love is mentioned, i end up visualizing Guy O_o and now im seeing Guy with the Sharingan. O_o o_O
    Sigh, never read comments before the actual story / first post -__- "
    I really liked how you described Love with the sharingan though...like, I could feel the twist. I knew Love was going to be a character with lots of surprises.
    Reading this chapter made Miyagi my favorite character in this story...
    But I was really surprised that he allowed Shisui and Kagami off on thier own, especially because he was reluctant to take the mission on in the first place (because of the danger his students might be in).
    But then, I could see no other way around in the situation.
    I don't think I need to criticize your actual writing, it's fine...I remember in the last chapter, when you went back and forth between people/views, (and in this chapter I guess?) you'd just do '..' and then typed out the next scene...perhaps you can skip a line or something to make it clearer? I can still understand with what you already do, so it's not really needed...just an idea.
    Edit - forgot to mention, even though he sorta lost, I liked Kou's fight the best.
     
         
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    You and Naruto Kyuubi did a good job.



    Sigh, never read comments before the actual story / first post -__- "
    I really liked how you described Love with the sharingan though...like, I could feel the twist. I knew Love was going to be a character with lots of surprises.
    Reading this chapter made Miyagi my favorite character in this story...
    But I was really surprised that he allowed Shisui and Kagami off on thier own, especially because he was reluctant to take the mission on in the first place (because of the danger his students might be in).
    But then, I could see no other way around in the situation.
    I don't think I need to criticize your actual writing, it's fine...I remember in the last chapter, when you went back and forth between people/views, (and in this chapter I guess?) you'd just do '..' and then typed out the next scene...perhaps you can skip a line or something to make it clearer? I can still understand with what you already do, so it's not really needed...just an idea.
    Edit - forgot to mention, even though he sorta lost, I liked Kou's fight the best.
    Yeah with the situation of this mission. I had planned to have it this way from the beginning. See the mission itself was of high importance to Konoha to the point where failure wasn't an option. It was Konoha's one break to get regain its strength and the success of the mission would assure an allience with the new village. Miyagi made the move because I wanted to show that he cared deeply about his students but he also had that element of making sacrifices. He wouldn't send his two students after a guy who was giving him trouble so he had to to the next best thing. You saw he had to break out one of his strongest and most draining jutsu to get rid of the guy quickly to go back and help the others.
     
         

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