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    The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Authors Note

    Alright This is the first installment of my new series based on Darui during the 4th Great Shinobi War.
    I wont say to much now but lets prepeare for the story of a lifetime.(btw all white zetsu)

    The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm
    Chapter 1
    Prologue

    Narrator: The 3rd Raikage, Killer Bee and Darui show up at a large metal door(outside Land Of The Clouds)

    Raikage: Are you two ready for the fight of your lives?

    Killer Bee:Im ready to knock his chariat down with my Lariat

    Darui:Im ready as i will ever be just remember the plan Boss.

    Raikage: Alright Lets Go !!

    Narrator: The Raikage takes his robes off and activates his lightning armor then he punches down the door with Killer Bee and Darui behind him.

    Darui: Remember the mission is to bust in take down Kabuto and anyone else including Zetsu's and resurrected ninja. But first we have to stop Kabuto as the is our main objective.

    Killer Bee: Where is he that unworthy tool when im done he will be a broken tool.

    Kabuto:Im right here and i have been waiting for you. How about a little 2 on 3 match up. Come On Out Boys.

    Narrator:They hear a big crash followed by a large smoke screen. Two large figures appear out of the smoke cloud and to there suprise it is the Second and Third Raikage's standing right in front of them in the empty inner dome of the cave there. The 3 looked around and they noticed over 100 Zetsu waiting on standby.

    Darui:Boss are you sure about this we can retreat now before they try anything.

    Kabuto: Listen to him he is right the odds are against you im giving you the chance to run.

    Raikage:Yes im sure we will never get a chance like this i would faster die than let this scum getaway forever. We have been looking for him 2 years now. Ever since he brought back the twins and almost killed you i promised i would find him because your my Right Arm. Bee are you with us

    Killer Bee:Im always beside you bro just leaving is a big no yo

    Raikage: We willllll fight right here right now!! Lets go Darui And Killer Bee

    Narrator: The 3 dash to the 2nd and 3rd. Darui jumps in the air and unfolds his sword while Bee and the 4th are going to throw their first attack.

    Raikage: Double Lariat!!!
    Killer Bee: Double Lariat!!!

    Narrator: They went for the 3rd with their Forwards Double Lariat. Suddenly both them stop in mid air. The 3rd Raikage had stopped Bee And The 4th just by grabbing their faces simultaneously

    3rd Raikage: You would think my son and grandson would atleast be able to put a scratch on the old bones *smirks*

    Darui: Let boss go!!


    Narrator: Darui cuts off the 3rd Raikages right arm holding the 4rd Raikage. Darui then uses Laser Circus to stop the 3rd once and for all releasing Killer Bee.

    Raikage: Bee Seal him with that new jutsu you told me about!

    Killer Bee: Of course, 8 Doors Of The Underworld: Bijuu Forever Seal!!!

    3rd Raikage: Nooooo!

    Raikage: Bye Dad, good to see you one more time
    Killer Bee: Sorry Dad

    Kabuto: Now the real battle starts. Zetsu's help the 2nd finish the 3. I will be leaving now.

    Raikage: Kabuto! I will kill you before you even get a chance.

    Narrator: The Raikage attempted to dash to Kabuto's location but Darui restrained him. The Raikage hits Darui in the stomach with his palm as a result of holding him back

    Raikage: Never do that again Darui!!!

    Darui: We need to worry about ourselves surviving. After we are done here we will track him down and finsh him. Me and Killer Bee shall take the Zetsu. I will leave the 2nd to you. Ok

    Raikage: Alright but where is Bee?

    Killer Bee: Tailed Beast Mode!!!

    Darui: Looks like he got a head start. None the less lets go!

    Narrator: The battle begins!! Darui starts picking of the Zetsu's one at a time with his lightning infused bladed and Bee is taking them out by the 20's.

    Darui: Hey Bee something is up we obviously took out 100 so why does it seem like there is more

    Killer Bee: I dont know we just have to keep fighting until we think of something*got to think fast and quick*

    Raikage: Ahh (graping for air) put me down magat.
    Lightning Armor!!!

    Narrator: The 4th and 2nd's battle wasnt on the 4th's side. The 2nd's speed and strength is double that of the 4th raikage's. The second dealt a barrage of powerful punches to the point. The Raikage fled back to Darui when he got a opening away from the 2nd.

    ~At The Back Entrance of the Cave~

    Kabuto: Hmph*smirks* those fools though i would just leave them in there with a chance on survival haha. I am the Legendery Genius Kabuto *Snaps his fingers* Heh Die!!!!

    ~Back To The Fight In The Cave~

    Darui:I get it now everytime we kill one it regenerates and divides.

    Killer Bee:We wont survive at this at this rate *he exits Tailed Beast Mode* No!!! What are whe supposed to do

    ~BANG~

    Raikage: Damn, the whole cave is coming down!

    Killer Bee:Run to the exit!

    Darui: Go Go Go!

    Narrator They start to run to the exit across the room. They get half way and hear a yell NOOO!!!

    Raikage:Bee!! Damn im coming brother. Darui go i will be right behind you.

    Narrator: About 30 zetsu were holding Bee back

    Darui: I wont leave you Boss no matter what.

    Narrator: The Raikage had fought to get them zetsu off but there were tooo many of them and they kept coming back. A huge boulder suddenly fell from the roof of the cave.

    Darui: Boss Look!!

    Raikage: Shut Up and listen

    Darui:Nooo

    Raikage:*whispers* Good Luck Haaaaaa!

    Narrator: The Raikage grabs Darui's cross shoulder strap and throws him at high speeds out the cave

    Darui: Noooo!!

    Narrator: Darui is rocketed out of the cave. He lands softly on the ground from losing speed. He watches as the whole cave comes down.
    There is no signs of neither Bee or the Fourth Raikage. Darui gets up and runs to the rubble that used to be the cave.

    Darui : Crap how is this happening. They will be just fine I know it.

    Narrator : Suddenly at beam of purple light shoot from the rubble up into the clouds. Darui starts to shed tears from the bottom of my heart.

    Darui: It was my entire fault I was supposed to be The Bosses Right Arm. Now he has lost more than that. I never thought this day would come. That should have been me!!

    Narrator: Suddenly Darui feels a heavy arm on his shoulder. Darui turns around to see the Raikage and Killer Bee right behind him

    Darui: Oh My Ninja God!!! You survived Boss and you to Bee.

    Narrator: Darui jumps up to hug Raikage but he just phases through.

    Darui: Wait what? Why did I fall through you?

    Raikage Ghost: I’m a projection spirit if you have seen this, my plan worked perfectly and now I will explain everything.

    Darui: What do you mean explain everything?

    Raikage Ghost: The 3rd Raikage didn't create the storm release himself. He and Orochimaru created it together as a dark deal.
    The Storm Release is old than you think. It was first thought of by the 2nd near his death and the 3rd carried his legacy and dream by creating it. But as a result of the test being on the 3rd he he was implanted with a deadly disease called H2N2. This was before Me and Bee was born but thanks to us being his son we both had a disease. When we found out we knew that Orachimaru was the only one with the cure so we set out to find him but when we got the news he died by Sasuke Uchiha we postponed it. We did some research and we found out the cure was in Orachimaru's blood and Kabuto his accomplish had absorbed Orochimaru we had to find him. All this was done undercover by the Special Ops to not start fear to me and Bee's death. We thought we had him today beacause of our special doctors saying that we have a week to get the cure or it’s over. Fearing that we wouldn’t meet the deadline I made a chakra seal to implace all my power speed and justu into you. I secretly placed it when I hit you in the stomach. The plan was if Bee and I were to Die we could risk are village losing that much power so me and Bee created to seal together so if we both died you would contain his Bijuu and my powers. It was debatable to put that much control in one man but we knew you could handle it. Well im losing chakra so I will have to leave soon. One more thing you are the new Raikage look in my secret bunker and you will find a Ram scroll give it to the Elders and you are hereby put as The 5th Raikage. Well that is the rest of my chakra so I will be leaving now and Darui

    Darui: Yes Boss

    Raikage Ghost: You’re going to make a great leader.

    Narrator:They both fade away and the beam of purple light from before comes down from the clouds and strikes Darui.

    Darui:Aww I feel the power surging through me. To much power.

    Narrator: Darui passes out




    Authors Note

    Thanks for reading the first installment of my Storm Chronicles. If you like rep and leave a comment. Look forward to Chapter 2: The Journey This June

    Thank You,
     
         
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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Cool!
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Quote Originally Posted by Arts View Post
    Cool!
    I 2nd that
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    I have to say in the beginning, I thought where will he go with this story and you definitely surprised me as I did not think it would unravel this way. I liked the route you choose. There were some misspellings and who hasn’t but besides that you did a good job depicting Kishi’s characters. It will be interesting to see what you will do with this empowered protagonist. I’m looking forward to it ;)
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Thanks alot bro

    i just wish more people would read
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    cool....
    well written but with a few grammatical errors.
    link me to the next chapter
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    This is badass bro +rep for this
    Darui is my favorite so keep this up
     
         
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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Thanks u 2 the second chapter wont be coming until june 2nd so put it on you calender bro
    ( means alot being my first official Fanfic)
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Gd shyt man, enjoyed dat.
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Quote Originally Posted by Rinnegan On The Moon View Post
    Thanks alot bro

    i just wish more people would read
    Your welcome and don’t worry about it-I have had my fair shares of low ratings with my current Fanfiction though I will continue to the end and I’m not letting that stop me. Even if you don’t get the reviews your looking for the readers that are supporting you will be with you till the very end. So as long as you remember to link them to every chap as it will be a little difficult for them to remember themselves-believe me I would know ;)

    Quote Originally Posted by Rinnegan On The Moon View Post
    Thanks u 2 the second chapter wont be coming until june 2nd so put it on you calender bro
    ( means alot being my first official Fanfic)
    Can’t wait to view how this Fanfiction will be molded! ;p
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Awesome man, good work! When will you release the new chapter?
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Thanks for all the great comments and part 2 is on its way
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Wow, I really liked this. I kind of wish there was more development, like A would've died 5-6 chapters later and not in the first one. Same for Bee. I felt like Bee didn't do much here, he died without anything special.

    However, Darui is awesome and this story is really good. I can't wait till Part 2.
     
         
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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    thank you

    i didnt really want a main character to do much in this series
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Quote Originally Posted by Rinnegan On The Moon View Post
    thank you

    i didnt really want a main character to do much in this series
    Just promise Bee will return via flashback to help Darui later on !

    I getcha. This is Darui's story afterall.
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    ya thats actualy a good idea i will think about and make sure to rep
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    An interesting and potential storyline you have here. I like the way this is going and I think it was entertaining to read. As some said, there was some grammar errors and some bad choice of words sometimes, but nevertheless, both you and this FF got a potential to become something big. Keep going
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Got done reading and I like where it is heading ^_^. Keep up the good work and take your time

    Can't wait to see the next chapter.
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    in the first line you said it was 3rd raikage but it was 4th right
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    very well done i liked it alot good job
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    I really like it. If i knew how to rep i would lol. Link me to next chapte please
     
         

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    Re: The Chronicles Of The Legendary Storm I

    Quote Originally Posted by Optimus314 View Post
    I really like it. If i knew how to rep i would lol. Link me to next chapte please
    Chapter 2

    Chapter 3

    Chapter 4 is coming this weekend
     
         

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