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    The final fight

    Chapter 1. Turning the tables
    It's a dark and stormy night , as the two of them face each other at the Valley of the End. It's been a full 2 years since they've last exchanged blows . Naruto dawns his red cape showing is status as the Sage of Konoha. Sasuke standing on Madara's statue,Naruto on Hashirama's.

    Naruto: Sasuke i wont hold back. If you really intend to destroy the Leaf I'll be forced to stop you.

    Sasuke:Naruto.....I've already told you once before. You will be the one i kill first. If thats what you've agreed to, then let's settle it here.

    Naruto: i guess i have no choice. Here.

    Naruto reaches into his pocket and pulls out sasuke's old leaf headband.

    Sasuke: Heh! What did you bring that garbage for?

    Naruto: it's not garbage. It's proof that we're fighting on equal terms as leaf shinobi.

    Sasuke has a flashback of Naruto saying the same thing once during their fight on the hospital roof.

    Sasuke: I've long since cut my ties with that village. That same village who had my clan murdered! AND I WONT FORGIVE THEM FOR THAT!

    Naruto: Heheh. I guess i should've known . But like i said before, i can understand your hatred, because i could've taken the same path. Its settled then..from here on out we communicate with our fists.

    Naruto tosses over the headband towards sasuke, Sasuke tooses a kunai at the cloth of the band sending it flying into hashirama's statue.

    Sasuke vanishes in blinding speed toward Naruto

    He appears behind him with his sword drawn to naruto's back

    Sasuke: Die!

    He stabs Naruto through the back..piercing his heart . A puff of smoke appears

    Sasuke: Hmph, same old tricks i see.

    The real Naruto appears behind sasuke with sage mode activated. He sends sasuke flying with one punch.
    Sasuke crashes into the chest of Madara's statue.

    Sasuke: UGH!!

    Naruto: not exactly the same old trick huh...
    Naruto cracks a smile

    Sasuke leaps over off the statue onto the water below.Naruto also leaps down.

    Sasuke: i see. So you have been preparing for this moment. But i still stand by what i say. You will die by my hands.

    Naruto : ( i could have killed sasuke with that punch..but i just cant. I know there is a way to win without killing him)

    Sasuke activates his sharingan

    Sasuke: (that wasnt a normal punch. If i take too many of those im done for)

    Sasuke summons a large shuriken and throws it at naruto
    Naruto easily jumps over the shuriken

    Sasuke appears above Naruto's head aiming to drive his sword down through him.

    Naruto snaps sasuke's sword in mid air in a similar fashion that he did to pain's chakra reciever.

    Sasuke:!!!!

    Sasuke thrusts his body in order to kick Naruto with a mid air roundhouse kick.

    Naruto catches it with his elbow while while grinning at sasuke . Naruto pushes his leg away and punches sasuke in the stomach

    Sasuke: !!!Uugh!!

    Sasuke lands in the water.

    Sasuke quickly pulls himself together and stands.

    Sasuke: ..... (what the is going on?! He couldnt even touch me during our last fight until he used his nine tails.)

    Sasuke has a flashback of him being the one sending Naruto flying back with one punch during their first battle

    Naruto: You seem surprised sasuke.

    Sasuke: i mustt admit Naruto , whatever training you've done. It worked..but you're still not my equal. Im not convinced yet.

    Sasuke: Fire Ball jutsu!

    Naruto dodges it but is met with five small shurken

    He pulls out a kunai and deflects them... Sasuke quickly .comes behind him with a chidori

    Naruto releases the chakra from his feet and falls into the water in order to dodge sasuke's attack

    Sasuke: (he's gotten good)

    Naruto creates a shadow clone under water to form a giant rasengan

    The rotation from the giant rasengan causes a large whirlpool under sasuke.

    With sasuke being sucked in Naruto jumps out high from under the water

    Sasuke summons another large shuriken and throws it toward Naruto

    It lands causing a puff of smoke killing off the clone

    Sasuke: another one!?

    Sasuke has now been sucked under water only to see naruto swimming toward him

    Sasuke unleashes his full bady chidori causing a electrical current in the water..

    Naruto is hit by the electricity..,...... somewhat stunned by the electricity he tries to swim up to escape sasuke' attack..

    Sasuke follows

    They both Shoot from the water forcefully.


    Naruto : shadow clone Jutsu!

    2 clones appear on each side of Naruto..they form a rasengan in each of the original's hands.

    Sasuke: that wont work against me

    Sasuke activates his Mangekyo Sharingan and forms the susanoo rib cage

    Naruto's clones grab his arms and throw him toward sasuke..

    Naruto smashes a rasengan to the front pair of susanoo's ribs.

    Small cracks appear on susanoo's rib cage

    Sasuke:!!!

    Naruto: (what? Just like madara....?)

    They both fall to the water and quickly dash back from each other.

    Sasuke: Naruto You've improved you're definitely not the same loser u were in the past. But there is no way you escape this.

    Sasuke's eye begins to bleed...

    Next Chapter: No Holding Back!!

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    Re: The final fight

    Good shit *****.
     
         

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    Good shit *****.
    Thanks bro...eidit ur post tho..I've seen people banned for saying that
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    nice..its great...
    i like how ur using actual "ninja-like" tactics instead of OP techs
    and i also like how naruto and sasuke sort of switched places from their last fight
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by -Carnage- View Post
    nice..its great...
    i like how ur using actual "ninja-like" tactics instead of OP techs
    and i also like how naruto and sasuke sort of switched places from their last fight
    Thanks man...I appreciate that... yea I don't like the dbz feel that kishi has placed..but those are their powers and I'll have to touch on that aspect sooner or later-_- lol
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    it good but you made it seem like sasuke would have gotten beat/killed with 1 punch and made it were he got beat up the most
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by suzano View Post
    it good but you made it seem like sasuke would have gotten beat/killed with 1 punch and made it were he got beat up the most
    ...I see ur a sasuke fan...yea man..he would have died...but naruto didn't surround that punch with senjutsu...he can kill people with one punch if he does that....BUT he couldnt bring himself to do it....keep an open mind as sasuke didn't have his shirngan or MS activated...and when I'm on the next chapter naruto will wish he had killed him..just be patient..I know how to "not be biased". Lmao..

    Ps if it makes u feel better..sasuke would have killed Naruto with his sword had sai not have saved him when it was teamn yamato vs sasuke...

    P s s. Its not that sasuke got beat up the most....its to show the growth of naruto and the reason why sasuke shouldn't and won't berate him anymore....thus I named it"turning the tables" because this time Naruto was the one with a strong start..like sasuke in the first fight
     
         
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    Re: The final fight

    Good Work Bro . I cant wait for the next part , felt like I was reading something straight from the manga
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

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    Good Work Bro . I cant wait for the next part , felt like I was reading something straight from the manga
    Thanks man. Much appreciated
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Nice one it seems we have good manga writers in naruto base
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by koolsmooch View Post
    Nice one it seems we have good manga writers in naruto base
    Thanks xD
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    It's nice.

    It would be better if A.) Correct grammar..and no abbreviation. Ex. Ur

    Personal preference but I would like it better if instead of using a normal font you used italics ..ya know?
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by James Harrsion View Post
    It's nice.

    It would be better if A.) Correct grammar..and no abbreviation. Ex. Ur

    Personal preference but I would like it better if instead of using a normal font you used italics ..ya know?
    Thanks...I'm aiming to have the best fanfictions on NB. I didn't even notice the "ur". Good eye....I guess I'm so use to internet grammar..lmao
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Feels like Dejavu?! Looks good to me

    I do agree with the grammar like "ur" being you're and what not. Figured you had placed it in such a manner just to save time before you re-wrote it for the post!
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

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    Feels like Dejavu?! Looks good to me

    I do agree with the grammar like "ur" being you're and what not. Figured you had placed it in such a manner just to save time before you re-wrote it for the post!
    Guys. Also give KGB kakuzu credit....he helped me. Capture. The essence of the characters a bit more and that really helps the story
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by SageMode 23 View Post
    Guys. Also give KGB kakuzu credit....he helped me. Capture. The essence of the characters a bit more and that really helps the story
    Hahaha I would say the credit has been given where it was due lol. All I did was shorten Sasuke's lines to try and match his attitude (I mean the things he was saying already matched what he might say, hit not as close to how he may say it)....you did pretty much everything
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by KGB Kakuzu View Post
    Hahaha I would say the credit has been given where it was due lol. All I did was shorten Sasuke's lines to try and match his attitude (I mean the things he was saying already matched what he might say, hit not as close to how he may say it)....you did pretty much everything
    And don't forget correcting me on susanoo. capturing the actual essence of the character is what makes a fanfic feel real and ur corrections help set up for the next chapter.... So yes u deserve credit because I will make u my official editor...lol
     
         
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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by SageMode 23 View Post
    ...I see ur a sasuke fan...yea man..he would have died...but naruto didn't surround that punch with senjutsu...he can kill people with one punch if he does that....BUT he couldnt bring himself to do it....keep an open mind as sasuke didn't have his shirngan or MS activated...and when I'm on the next chapter naruto will wish he had killed him..just be patient..I know how to "not be biased". Lmao..

    Ps if it makes u feel better..sasuke would have killed Naruto with his sword had sai not have saved him when it was teamn yamato vs sasuke...

    P s s. Its not that sasuke got beat up the most....its to show the growth of naruto and the reason why sasuke shouldn't and won't berate him anymore....thus I named it"turning the tables" because this time Naruto was the one with a strong start..like sasuke in the first fight
    yea im a sasuke fan lol but killing him in 1 punch would make sasuke look way to weak and the twist from the final valley was a nice touch anyway
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Very nice I enjoyed it good start to your FF plus rep VM me when you release the next chapter.
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Thats really good, WELL done :D
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Quote Originally Posted by suzano View Post
    yea im a sasuke fan lol but killing him in 1 punch would make sasuke look way to weak and the twist from the final valley was a nice touch anyway
    Bro..I'm a sasuke fan as well...I didn't like naruto until after he learned to use his clones properly after his RS training and after sage mode...then I just reallybecame a fan of his sage mode...lmao.....sasike one shots anyone with amaterasu and naruto can one shot with his senjutsu. They are both epic characters.
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by SageMode 23 View Post
    Bro..I'm a sasuke fan as well...I didn't like naruto until after he learned to use his clones properly after his RS training and after sage mode...then I just reallybecame a fan of his sage mode...lmao.....sasike one shots anyone with amaterasu and naruto can one shot with his senjutsu. They are both epic characters.
    ha epic indeed
     
         

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    Re: The final fight

    Holy cow it does seem like i am reading manga! I love it!
     
         

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    Holy cow it does seem like i am reading manga! I love it!
    Thank u. I try ...
     
         

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    Good shit *****.
    @OP good sh*t cracker.
     
         

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