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    Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    Chapter 43: Koji's Will and Koichi's New Teacher


    *It looks like I'm on my own for this one* Koichi walks through the back streets of Konoha with his hands behind his head. *I wonder where I should start...*

    “ONE, TWO, THREE, FOUR LET'S GO SENTEN!” Koichi hears a loud voice over in the distance and he sees a shinobi running at an incredible speed past him.

    “What the hell?” Koichi says with confusion as he

    “Lee, slow down.” Followed close behind the shinobi is a kunoichi and behind her a reasonable distance are three genin: Tenzen, Senten and Bo.

    “That's...” Koichi begins to think to himself. *That's that little brat Tenzen...and that's Koga's first opponent. Hmm, I guess there's no better way to train then to scope out your enemy.* Koichi cracks a smile and begins to follow them.
    ~Main Streets of Konoha~


    Koji walks through the streets followed closely behind by Kana. “So where are we going?” Kana asks.

    “I'm going back to find my brother and help him prepare for the exams.” Koji says.

    “I said you're not doing that, so just kill that idea right now.” Kana demands.

    “You don't have to follow me.” Koji says annoyed.

    “Look I didn't ask for this, Ino-shishou asked me to do this task and regardless of whether or not I want to do it or not I'm going to see it through because my loyalty to her is greater then my displeasure for this babysitting assignment so just deal with it. As long as I'm responsible for you, you're not lifting a damn finger in any sort of training or fighting.”

    “Fine, then we're going back to my hotel.”

    Koji and Kana begin making their way back to the hotel, Kana maintaining a fair distance from behind Koji.

    “Koji-kun, I've been looking for you.” Kankuro says exiting the hotel. “Here,” Kankuro pulls out four scrolls. “I got word from the medics that you were discharged and weren't going to be very active too much...and I see you have yourself a personal attendant.” Kankuro walks to Kana “You must be Ino's cousin, my name is Kankuro nice to meet you.”

    “Hi.” Kana doesn't make eye contact with Kankuro, her tone is unfriendly towards him and Kankuro looks at the young girl confused slightly.

    “Well anyway, this is some new material for a new puppet. I'll help you with the chakra fixtures later but I thought this would keep you busy for a little while.”

    “Thank you sensei.” Koji takes the scrolls and proceeds onward into the hotel. Kana follows close behind and Kankuro notices the discontent in both of their expressions and he merely shrugs it off and continues on his way.

    In the hotel room, Koji unravels the four scrolls around him and makes the half tiger seal. Suddenly four clouds of smoke, several wooden pieces appear from on top of them. Kana lays down on the bed and lets out a large sigh “Shishou, why did you have me do this?” she says to herself.
    ~Konoha Training Grounds~


    “Senten, you're the last of our squad, we're going to work as a team to make sure you reach your goals.” Lee says. All three of his genin a panting and sweating heavily.

    “Lee, they need to rest, you've been on them all morning.”

    “Nonsense, they're bustling with the spirit of youth!” Lee says enthusiastically. “Come on Senten, show her your youth!” Senten picks himself off the ground and stands firm on his feet panting. “That's the spirit.”

    “Shinmasui no jutsu!” Senten shoots his hands out towards Lee and suddenly Lee's head droops down and he falls over unconscious.

    Note: Shinmasui no jutsu (Mind Slumber Technique)


    Senten sighs and he sits back down. “Tenten-sensei, did you have to deal with this when you trained with him?” Senten asks.

    “Yes, him and our sensei. They were two of a kind but now I think Lee's gotten worse.”

    “I couldn't imagine anything worse then that.” Tenzen points and sees Lee doing push ups while in his sleep, mumbling to himself.

    *This guy's crazy* Koichi thinks to himself as he hides in a tree.

    “*sigh* I should wake him up.” Senten says, he makes the tiger seal, “Release!” Lee snaps out of his slumber and wakes up on his way down to the ground for another pushup. “How mad do you think he'll be?”

    “Great job Senten! Give your opponent a sense of false reassurance and then strike! I prefer the frontal attack style myself but everybody has their own way of fighting HAHAHA!!” The team of genin hold their head down in shock at their sensei's attitude.

    “Gosh Lee, I swear you and Gai sensei are two of a kind. Never take a rest for anything. Not everybody has your level of endurance and the ability to keep up with you. To be honest I don't believe any genin on this earth does.” Tenten says.

    “What are you saying Tenten? I was able to keep up with Gai sensei with no problem when I was a genin!”

    “That's because you two had the same warped mind. It was easy for you since you idolized him. You sort of assimilated to his mind set which allowed you to do so. Neji and I both agreed it was unhealthy—”

    “You there! Stop your hiding and come reveal yourself!” Lee points into the tree cutting off Tenten. The team of genin.

    *What the hell, he spotted me?* Koichi's eyes widen. *I better split then.*

    “If you're not going to come out, I'll make you.” Suddenly Lee appears in the tree behind Koichi as he spins “Leaf Whirlwind.” Lee kicks Koichi out of the tree hard, however Koichi managed to put both his arms up to block him. Koichi lands on and slides back a long distance from the sheer strength of the kick.

    *What is that speed and power?!* Lee lands and heads for him quickly. Koichi puts his guard up quick and as Lee launches a barrage of attacks Koichi begins to evade only. He side steps, ducks and swerves around most of Lee's attacks but only just. Lee goes to shoot out a punch and Koichi moves to the left. With a quick follow up, Lee does a spinning hook heel kick and Koichi puts up his arms again and is kicked back again.

    “Nice job, you can avoid 15% of my speed, now how about 25?”

    *The hell?!* Lee appears in front of Koichi the split moment after he finishes his sentence. Koichi barely has time to react and he uses Shunshin to avoid his attack, getting to the top of a tree. Lee appears behind him just as Koichi appears there and he kicks only to be stopped be a mass of sand. Koichi uses Shunshin again and appears on the ground to run *I had to plan that perfectly if I had plan my sand to move in front of me I would've been a goner. If this is the guy at 25% I don't want to be any higher then that* Koichi turns his head to his front from looking back at Lee and the moment he does he sees a fist coming straight to his face and he is sent flying back.

    Koichi is knocked out on impact. He awakes a few moments later in a daze to hear Tenten's voice. “Lee I think you over did it.”

    “Hehe, maybe I did.” Koichi comes back into focus and shakes his head. “You have some pretty quick moves there son. You're just bustling with the spirit of youth!”

    Koichi gets up and shakes his head off. “What's the big idea attacking me like that, I was about to come down.” Koichi lies.

    “Why were you spying on us?” Senten asks. “Trying to get the upper hand in the fight? Are you trying to warn your Suna buddy about my abilities?”

    “*tsk* I could care less, I actually hope you kick his ass.” Koichi says. “I just thought I could bounce some training ideas off of you guys that's all.”

    “Well you've come to the right place!” Lee says patting Koichi on the shoulder. The three genin and Tenten look at Lee with surprise. “You're welcome to train with us if you so please.”

    “Sensei, he's the enemy here, he's going to be competing against Senten and he's not even from Konoha.” Tenzen says.

    “Nonsense, the secrets to unlocking one's youth to their fullest potential is for everybody!”

    Tenten hits Lee in the back of the head. “There's no way this kid can keep up with you, your own team can't even keep up with you, you're just going to end up running them into the ground like always.” Tenten says.

    “Hey, who says I can't keep up with him?!” Koichi asks.

    “Oh please, he laid you out with one punch.” Tenzen says. “At least we have some conditioning to deal with him a little. If you just jumped into the ball you'd get destroyed, then we'll be responsible, how troublesome.”

    “Shut up, I bet I could last the entire month keeping up with this guy at his fullest, better then you guys can.”

    “That's the spirit!” Lee says. “So, what do you guys say?”

    “No offense sensei, but I'll pass on the training. Your style of training isn't the best for my fighting style.” Senten says. “I'm pretty sure I can keep up physically with the rest of the contenders but I need to work on my strategy for winning.”

    “Yeah, Lee I think these guys need an alternative training method.”

    Lee's eyes widen and his jaw drops. Lee heads over into the corner and begins weeping and sulking. “My team is abandoning me!”

    “Oh come on now you hurt the guy's feelings.” Koichi says patting Lee on the back. “Fine, how's this, I'll show you I can keep up with him, I'll do it all by myself and while you do your little cushy training, we'll see how far it takes you in this last round.”

    “Fine with me.” Senten says.

    “You should treat us to BBQ when you lose.” Bo suggests.

    “Fine, and if I win you have to treat me to all the ramen I can eat,” Koichi looks at Bo, “And none of you can have any.”

    “That's fine, because we won't loose.” Senten says *poor fool, he's obviously never dealt with the appetite of an Akimichi, otherwise he would've been reluctant to agree to this.*

    “Then it's settled then.” Lee perks up and places his hand on Koichi's shoulder.

    The other three begin walking away. “Have fun.” Tenzen says with sarcasm as the four of them leave.
    ~Back at the Hotel~


    “This is so boring, watching you mess around with toys.” Kana complains.

    “These aren't toys and you're welcome to leave any time you like.” Koji says.

    “Just shut up kid.”

    “You know I'm not that much younger then you.” Koji turns his head to her a little annoyed. “I'm 13.”

    “And I'm almost 15, just leave it alone you're a kid to me unless you prove me otherwise.”

    “I see...want to relieve some of your boredom, you could help me with the latch.” Koji suggests.

    “Whatever.” Kana gets off the bed and walks over to Koji. “What do you need?”

    “Just tell me if this works.” Koji moves his body and a nozzle shoots out a large stream of poison gas towards Kana. She reacts quickly and jumps to the ceiling as the shorts stream of gas doesn't reach that high.

    She looks down and sees Koji's hand as he leaves through the window the moment he activates the gas. “Damn it.” She leaps down of the ceiling and runs after Koji. She exits the building and gets to the top of the roof where Koji is and sees him running. “Get back here!” She punches the top of the roof and causes the it to collapse part way and Koji leaps up to the top of the water tower on the next roof. “Damn it!”

    “Hey!” Kana looks down and sees a couple in bed as a huge dust and rubble from the ceiling lay in their room.

    “Ah, sorry about that.” Kana leaps up to the next roof as Koji keeps her at bay with a half assembled puppet. “You're only making me think of you as more of a little kid, running away stupidly.”

    “Then you shouldn't have a problem dealing with a kid.” Koji taunts. He makes the puppet activate a hidden compartment which shoots out dozens of needles. Kana takes puts her fist into the ground as she takes out a kunai. She pulls up a large piece of the roof and throws it out in front of her and she launches the kunai with a wires attached to it. The needles block the path of the needles and the wired kunai wraps around the head of the puppet and she pulls it towards her.

    “I know how to fight against puppet users.” She slams her fist into the puppet destroying it with ease and she heads to Koji. She grabs Koji by the collar of the neck and lifts him up.

    “What about genjutsu?” Koji says. His body vanishes as he says that revealing the illusion. The real Koji walks the streets of Konoha as he looks for Koichi. He turns the corner only to be grabbed by Kana.

    “Yeah, I know a thing or two about genjutsu brat.” Kana smiles arrogantly. She ties Koji up with rope and carries him back to the hotel room. “I gotta admit, this is the first time all day I've had any fun so thanks kid.”

    “If that's the case then why stop.” Kana looks over to her shoulder and sees Koji replaced with a block of wood. She turns around and sees him standing behind her.

    “How did you—”

    “I told you already, I'm not standing by while my teammates need help. I underestimated you but still, I can handle you with one arm.” Koji says arrogantly.

    “Don't get cocky brat.” Kana tries to step forward but she finds herself unable to move. “What the...” She turns her head and notices chakra strings behind her and Koji's hand down by his side holds them.

    “You said you knew how to deal with puppet users, but you broke the cardinal rule when dealing with us, don't let your guard down. I'm pretty sure they teach that in the medical training, at least I expect them to.” Koji lifts his hand up and whips it to the left and Kana goes flying towards the roof and he release his strings and begins running.

    Kana catches herself and lands on the roof of a building. “Damn it, this is going to be a long day.” Kana heads out in pursuit of Koji. As the chase for Koji begins, so does Koichi's new training regimen.

    ~Scroll~
    Jutsu Archive

    Ninpo: Ukio Enko (Ninja Art: Life Connection)
    Rank: A
    Developer: Kankuro
    User(s): Kankuro
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: Developed by Kankuro of Sunagakure, this technique grants temporary animation to an puppet/inanimate object via transfering a portion of one's own chakra into the puppet. Similar in a way to the Shadow Clone Jutsu, the puppet acts and moves of it's own will, however it's mind and vision are linked to the user and the puppet itself has no base intelligence beyond instinctual fighting. The jutsu lasts for a period of time pending on the amount of chakra transfered into puppet. Chakra used up in this technique takes longer to replenish and extracts large amounts on base activation alone and more so as the jutsu is continued to be used in one single day. As a result the more times activated in one day the more chakra consumed and the less time the puppet remains active.

    Myaku Bushin (Pulsing Clone)
    Rank: C
    Developer: Mai Shichiyo
    User(s): Mai Shichiyo, Koichi Shichiyo
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This is a taijutsu technique from the style Suuxe-sensu, created by Mai Shichiyo. In this technique the user releases a full body blast of chakra from their body and it takes the shape of the user. The technique isn't an actual clone, however, the chakra takes the shape of the user, which gives the appearance of such. The jutsu has three uses: One, to distract or frighten one's opponent. Two to force one's opponent backwards as the chakra is dense enough, at its lowest chakra requriment to shatter through a tree. The third use is to make the user faster for a brief moment in time, as the release of such a great force of chakra all at once, temporarily gives one an almost weightless form, but with the same density allowing them to move faster. This jutsu takes chakra control on top of having a high level of chakra.

    Suuxe-sensu (Sway Style)
    Rank: N/A (fighting style)
    Developer: Mai Shichiyo
    Users(s): Mai Shichiyo, Koichi Shichiyo
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: Suuxe-sensu is the taijutsu fighting style developed by Sunagakure kunoichi Mai Shichiyo. In this style of fighting the user utilizes precice chakra control to line one's body with chakra. Derrived from Konoha's Hyuuga style, and the medical-nin fighting style of Chakra enhanced strength, the most basic of the techniques involves defensive circular movements meant to block and use an opponent's force against them. However when combined with chakra, the circular patterns become sharp and a circular block and be used as a blade. The few strikes and kicks used in this style are powerful. This style requires chakra control and large storages of chakra.

    Kansai Kekkai Rasengan (Trapping Barrier Spiraling Sphere)
    Rank: S
    Developer: Naruto Uzumaki
    User(s): Naruto Uzumaki
    Origin: Konohagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This is another advancement of the Rasengan created by Naruto Uzumaki. In order for this technique to work, several shinobi as the radius perimeter of the jutsu is large then that of a normal Rasengan. In Naruto's case, he would summon shadow clones to assist him in preforming the jutsu. The group would then surround the intended target and entrap them in a sphere of chakra. They would then begin to rotate their chakra as if a normal Rasengan and the billions of rotating chakra blades within the jutsu would come to overshadow the target and anything within the barrier would be virtually obliterated. The primary use of this jutsu is to create an inescapable trap around several shinobi or one/few large opponents.

    Oshi-eiei Kage (Push-pull shadow)
    Rank: B
    Developer: Shikamaru Nara
    User(s): Shikamaru Nara, Shikaku Nara, Nara clan (advanced)
    Origin: Konohagakure (During WWIV)
    Description: This is a varriation of the Shadow Imitation jutsu, the funadamental jutsu of the Nara clan. The user would extend his/her shadow just like in the normal technique to one or several targets. The user can then forcefully push away or attract their targets, closer to them (via extending or retracting their shadow (s)). One could also preform both tasks simultaniously. The advantages of this jutsu is that, if an one's opponent is primarily close ranged fighter while the user is not, they can repel them and keep them in their more comfortable range. However, this jutsu requires advanced chakra control as the acts of extending and/or retracting while keeping your target attached, and you stationary is a difficult feet.

    Boushi Kenhandou (Spinning Blade kick)
    Rank: C
    Developer: Mai Shichiyo
    User(s): Mai Shichiyo, Koichi Shichiyo
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: Part of the Suuex-sensu style, the user focues their chakra into legs and feet. While in the air they spin at a rapid pace, which would cause the white chakra to appear as if spinning around them. The user would then let down a powerful ax kick which holds two possible outcomes. The first out come, is if the user lands on their opponent with their foot, they will slice through whatever part of the body aimed for as the feet will possess the highest form of chakra control in the source of the blade. The second outcome would be if the user strikes with their shin, they will demonstrate a devestating force and power rather then a cutting affect.

    Shisho Kekkai (Four Symbols Barrier)
    Rank: A
    Developer: Naruto Uzumaki
    User(s): Naruto Uzumaki
    Origin: Konohagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This jutsu is activated via the Dragon-Rabit-Snake-Tiger seals. This is a defensive barrier technique designed to sheild several persons from large scale attacks. The four symbols insignia will appear underneath the area of defense and an invisible barrier of chakra will be set up around the targests. When impacted by chakra or weapons of any kind only the part being hit by the barrier will be shown via the chakra reacting to the blow. The strength of the barrier and how much it can take all depends on the user's chakra levels. Suprisingly enough the jutsu requires minimal chakra control, only to conjure up the seal and then once that's done the chakra is to be sent exited from the user's body and the seal will navigate the chakra to create the barrier, without the need for additional chakra control from the user. The main draw back to this jutsu is the fact that, while the barrier is up, the user cannot use their chakra to preform anymore techniques while inside the barrier, as the seal will have to be broken in order for the user to utilize their chakra without it going into the barrier.

    Kage Bushin Kansai (Shadow Clone Trap)
    Rank: B
    Developer: Shikamaru Nara
    User(s): Shikamaru Nara
    Origin: Konohagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This is a combination jutsu developed by Shikamaru Nara. The user will create a shadow clone, and since the clone contains the same chakra netowrk as the user, in the case of a Nara, they have knowledge of their clan's hidden shadow jutsu. The user would then get the clone close to their opponent and have the clone gain a hold of the shinobi, long enough for the user to release the clone, but instead of disapearing in a cloud, the clone would become a shadow that engulfs one's target. That being said, the shadow clone's shadow is now a part of the target and can now be accessed by the user. The shadow surrounding the target will then extend to the origional user and give him control over the target.

    Note: Fukyuu Kage Bushin no Jutsu (Eternal Shadow Clone Technique)
    Rank: S (Forbidden)
    Developer: Naruto Uzumaki
    Users: Naruto Uzumaki
    Origin: Konohagakure (During WWIV)
    Description: This technique is perhaps the strongest form of cloning jutsu to ever exist in the world. Created by Naruto Uzumaki, this technique allows for all clones created to remain on the battle field until and sustain any amount of damage without the justu being dispelled. Being taught how to manipulate/isolate only his YinYang elements by the Kurama, Naruto learned how to create a clone which exibits heavy durrability. This jutsu is unique to Naruto as it utilizes the chakra of Kurama as well. Naruto isolates his Yin chakra and the Kyuubi's Yang chakra and fuses it together to make the clone. Essencially the clone is only made up of those two elemental chakra bases and both Yin&Yang give it specific qualities. The Yang chakra gives it the physical manifestation of a clone, while the Yin chakra makes the clone unable to be destroyed, regenerating if need be. Naruto can only sustain one clone however, and the Konoha 11 have forbidden Naruto from using the jutsu as the justu's side affects are highly dangerous. Using the jutsu keeps an active link between the user and the clone's chakra meaning the longer it is used the more chakra is being sucked away from Naruto and Kurama. Similar to how Naruto's chakra mode left him vulnerable to the Kyuubi sucking away all his chakra before their cooporation. Also, after the jutsu is released the user only gains a fraction of the chakra lost back and his natural reserves are lowered, replenishing vastly slower then before. Naruto has only used the jutsu once and only half of the chakra he expended using the jutsu has returned to him...after 20 years.

    Ninpo: Suricata Soutei Tsuchi Kansui (Ninja Art: Mongoose Binding Earth Submersion)
    Rank: B
    Developer: N/A
    Users: Kai Taiyou, Ryoko Taiyou, Shinobi Meerkat
    Origin: Sunagakure (Pre-WWIV)
    Description: This is a collaboration technique between the meerkat summoning animals and any who are signed to the contract. In this technique, the shinobi will preform a modified version of the summoning technique hand seals, and place their hands on the ground. The shinobi will simultaniously summon a mob of meerkats and several chains. The meerkats will launch the chakra enfused chains up through the earth towards the desired target and restrict them. The meerkats will then tunnle deeper into the earth, dragging their opponent down into the ground forcefully, eventually crushing them under the preassure and also suffocating them. This is a fairly skilled technique as the summoner is responsible for summoning the mob of meerkats in the desired positions for them to preform this task, as well as having the chains shoot up through the ground (which requires chakra to enhance their power allowing them to go upwards) and home in on where they need to go.

    Iku Sabaku Kyu (Several Sand Coffins)
    Rank: B
    Developer: Gaara
    Users: Gaara, Koichi Shichiyo
    Origin: Sunagakure (Pre-WWIV)
    Description: This is a simple improvement on the origional Sand Coffin technique used by Gaara, however, instead of trapping a single opponent within the sand, he can trap several individuals in different sand caskets. Although the technique is simple in it's execution, those without a history of manipulating sand must utilize Gaara's Sand manipulation secrets to preform this technique, which requires seveal seals to unlock the chakra and manipulate it in a way to preform the jutsu. As Koichi is the only other person versed in Gaara's sand manipulation, he is the only exception account of needing seals to preform this technique. In theory, the jutsu should be just the same as the Sand Coffin, capturing your opponent in sand and increasing the preassure to crush the bones and organs of your opponent, however Koichi has not yet fully mastered the technique and can only summon up the sand to restrict the movements of the shinobi and isn't able to yet crush them.

    Ninpo: Magen Bara Keikyoku (Ninja Art: Demonic Rose Thorns)
    Rank: B
    Developer: Maiyuri Tazuko
    Users: Maiyuri Tazuko
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This technique is activated through the use of four hand seals, the shinobi creates several spiked, rose stem vines rise up from the ground underneath their opponent. The shinobi caster, channles their chakra into the ground underneath their opponents, affecting the vines beneath the earth sprouting them upwards sharpening them and the pricks beneath having them shoot up and impale or constrict their opponent.

    Niyubi Genkotsu (Two Finger Fist)
    Rank: C-B
    Developer: Udon
    Users: Udon
    Origin: Konohagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This is a fighting style that was developed by Tokubetsu Jounin Udon (Special Jounin) after the war. This is a taijutsu fighting style that consists of the basic principle of using the users two fingers (the index and middle finger). The user will channle precise and sharp chakra into their finger or knuckles and they'll strike in a series of rapid jabs that possess both; bone shattering force and muscle tearing and paralysis. The style is fast and precise, one technique consists of four or five different strikes in various locations of the body essentially breaking and numbing areas of the body rendering your opponent unable to move certian areas. Strikes are either done with the knuckles or the finger tips. Blocks are done with the knuckes and even the blocks serve to shut down systems in the opponent's body. This style has no form of kicks yet it has various stances used to get into the most vulnerable of positions of one's opponent.

    Magen: Temma Kariudo no Jutsu (Demonic Illusion: Demon Hunter Technique)
    Rank: A
    Developer: Koji Shichiyo
    Users: Koji Shichiyo
    Origin: Sunagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: Koji's Shichiyo's own designed illusion. His mastery of the genjutsu has allowed him to create an advanced Genjutsu such as this. This is a highly advanced Jounin level technique not because of the affects but because of the way it's cast. Koji preforms this technique without actually utilizing hand seals himself. Through the use of a puppet or controlled body, Koji manipulates the body to cast the required seals for him. With precise chakra control, Koji utilizes his will make the connection from the hand seals through his chakra strings attached to the body, which translates back to him as if he, himself casted the hand seals and all that is required of Koji is to direct the chakra for the illusion into his opponent's mind. This unique style of casting genjutsu created by Koji initiates almost instantly after the final seal is created, allowing him to cast the jutsu even if the body using the seals is far from his body. Koji can activate the jutsu quickly and swiftly. The feat of casting the illusion itself requires the chakra control of a master, and the affects that come with are strong as well. Once the illusion is cast, the user of the illusion creates the image of several chains restricting the victim and four demons peircing through their body with sharp blade. This jutsu effectively immobilizes one's opponent and causes them a great deal of pain, which will quickly render them unconscious if the justu isn't released quickly.
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    Shinmasui no jutsu (Mind Slumber Technique)
    Rank: B
    Developer: Ino Yamanaka
    Users: Ino Yamanaka, Kana Yamanaka, Senten Yamanaka
    Origin: Konohagakure (After WWIV)
    Description: This is one of the more advanced Mind control techniques of the Yamanaka clan. This was developed by the clan's leader after the Fourth Shinobi World War. Using the Yamanaka's seal the user will transfer their chakra into their opponent in a similar fashion to how genjutsu is conducted. Unlike the other Yamanaka mind techniques, where the user focuses on taking physical control of the victim's body through the mind or nervous system, this technqiue will enduce near instant unconsciousness. This technique inhibits the properties of the mind body switch with the exception that the user isn't transfering their own consciousness to their opponent rather stripping them of theirs for a brief moment. This technique is only temporary, lasting a few minutes at the longest, however this technique can be released upon the User's will before hand.

    Author's Note:
    I think I'm changing my releases to Saturdays and Sundays because I keep skipping Friday. Please comment on the story. What you liked/disliked etc. To those of you who read/comment/rep this post I thank you, enjoy


     
         
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    not bad
     
         

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    Reborn~~ No! I wasn't first!

    I really liked it, Reborn. There wasn't a thing I hated, I loved the whole chapter.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

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    not bad
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    Reborn~~ No! I wasn't first!

    I really liked it, Reborn. There wasn't a thing I hated, I loved the whole chapter.
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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    I really love the characterization in this chapter, with the characters all in different scenes. Though I still find it hard to remember all the characters
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    Lee's awesome. Really fast! Koichi is a jinchuuriki so I bet he can keep up with Lee. We'll see. Koji's so cool.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    Loved the chapter bro. Its 3:30 AM and I want another chapter.lol This is one of my favorites if not my favorite chapter so far.

    I liked every scene, they were all interesting ..
    and you're yamanaka characters are interesting too, makes me want to make a "Senten" bio.lol And Lee would be the coolest sensei ever and its cool how you have him playing a part in koichi's development. Kinda ironic too, as a genin the shukaku host nearly ended Lee's shinobi career but now he's helping the new one grow.

    Again, great chapter, keep up the good work.

    Oh yeah, yesssssssss a chapter without ryoko! See how much better chapters are without her.lol
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    Quote Originally Posted by LionDemon View Post
    I really love the characterization in this chapter, with the characters all in different scenes. Though I still find it hard to remember all the characters
    Yeah I have a lot of characters, however a lot of them will become insignificant to the story for a little while after the chuunin exams. There's really on a few new characters I plan on revealing to after that it shouldn't be hard to organize them ^^.

    Quote Originally Posted by Uzumaki16 View Post
    Lee's awesome. Really fast! Koichi is a jinchuuriki so I bet he can keep up with Lee. We'll see. Koji's so cool.
    Yeah, I love Lee's character but we probably won't see too much of him after this until a certian point and even then it won't bee too much.

    Quote Originally Posted by william24 View Post
    Loved the chapter bro. Its 3:30 AM and I want another chapter.lol This is one of my favorites if not my favorite chapter so far.

    I liked every scene, they were all interesting ..
    and you're yamanaka characters are interesting too, makes me want to make a "Senten" bio.lol And Lee would be the coolest sensei ever and its cool how you have him playing a part in koichi's development. Kinda ironic too, as a genin the shukaku host nearly ended Lee's shinobi career but now he's helping the new one grow.

    Again, great chapter, keep up the good work.

    Oh yeah, yesssssssss a chapter without ryoko! See how much better chapters are without her.lol
    Well another chapter is coming out shortly today, It's all ready I just have to proof it ^^. I'm sort of a Yamanaka fanboy in both the series and in the RP so I like using them a lot.

    Yeah it is Ironic, although Lee's pretty much forgiven Gaara. What I liked in Naruto series was how quickly enemies became comrades. Despite Gaara almost killing Lee in the exams, you have Gaara coming to his rescue against Kimmimaro and then later you have Lee on a mission to save Gaara from the Akatsuki

    You'll be happy to know Ryoko won't be coming back until the exams start, reason is that I can never think of a great way to articulate her training. Also, with her character I like it when she disappears for a little while and just comes back with a brand new skill set. Ryoko's no longer a push over since I will tell you her father has stopped pulling his punches (yeah, he's been doing that). Once you see Ryoko's father fight (way future) you'll understand although I'm almost sure you didn't want to hear that...m, probably why I said it
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    its another nice one ^_^
     
         

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    good job as usual
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

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    its another nice one ^_^
    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    good job as usual
    Thanks ^^
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    I thought Naruto would be his new trainer.....that Gaara would ask Naruto to help him out to control the beast
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    I thought Naruto would be his new trainer.....that Gaara would ask Naruto to help him out to control the beast
     
         

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    Re: Naruto: Shichiyo Gaiden XLIII

    Great chapter! Is there any possibility for a Koji X Kana future? Only time will tell...
     
         

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