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    Prologue: Deadly Love

    Long ago, in the deepest part of the mountains, lived two completely different tribes. One tribe lived on the West and the other on the East. The tribes hated one another and each time they came into contact with someone from that tribe, they quickly went into battle. One day, a young lady was walking alongside the mountain’s river, looking for special herbs, when she was stabbed in the side by a knife. She turned around and saw a man from the mountain tribe with the bloody knife in his hand. The man looked at her with a smile on his face when suddenly the man ended up on the ground with the woman’s hand on his neck.

    The young lady started to change in front of the man. Her long, brown hair turned jet black, flowing in front of her face as her blue eyes turned a golden color while her peach skin became silver. Her teeth began to sharpen at a point as the man tried to escape from her. Desperately, the man took the knife in his hand and stabbed the young lady on the shoulder as she screamed in pain. Before the man could get back on his feet, the young lady had taken her long sharp nails and stabbed the man in the back, causing the nails to go through his lungs and heart.

    “What..are you?” asked the man as the young lady’s nails came out of his back. She turned the man over and looked him in the eyes, causing the man to stare back at her as she leaned in closer to him.

    “You and your tribe will forever be cursed by us.” Said the young lady as she took her nails and stabbed the man in his eyes. She pulled her nails out of the man’s eyes sockets as she turned back into her human form, tossing the man’s body into the river as she goes back to picking herbs before heading back to her village. She looked up at the mountain behind her, licking the blood off of her fingers from the hand she killed the man with and then places her fingers on her side where she was stabbed as she continues to walk.
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    I know this is short but it was something I came up with in class one day and thought it should be put on here. Also i didn't know what to call this story. If it’s any good, I can post more chapters when I have the time.
     
         
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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Great Fanfic
     
         

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    I think You think you think
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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Its very nice !
    And mysterious.
    Good job. !:D
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    G r e a t S t o r y ! !
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    It was a really Nice Story keep up the excellent work
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Well you captured my interests and I would like to see where you take this story.
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    It's really good.
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by PinkLightning View Post
    Well you captured my interests and I would like to see where you take this story.
    i would too lol
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    talking about a wolf in sheepsclothing
    pretty violent and bloody , but its likeable to me
    nice nice
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    *walks through the forest just at the smell of a great FF pie entices me and I float to the pie*

    Oh god, what a great smelling FF this is...I wonder where I can get more

    tbh at first when I heard the two village thing and then the young lady stuff, I thought this might be a classic, Romeo & Juliet thing (or the story of the Kouga Ninja Scrolls, which is similar to Romeo & Juliet) but then you had the whole stabbing in the side of the female by the male

    then the female transforming into this mysterious and possibly demonic creature and killing him coldly with the ominous...

    “You and your tribe will forever be cursed by us.”
    The way you described the scene was really good, and also what you did with the woman licking the blood off her fingers; after you described her appearance, I say this with as limited pervertedness as possible, but it greatly added to her sex appeal and was rather seductive at the same time.....in a sadistic way I guess lol.

    Please link me to your chapters once you release them ^^
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    *walks through the forest just at the smell of a great FF pie entices me and I float to the pie*

    Oh god, what a great smelling FF this is...I wonder where I can get more

    tbh at first when I heard the two village thing and then the young lady stuff, I thought this might be a classic, Romeo & Juliet thing (or the story of the Kouga Ninja Scrolls, which is similar to Romeo & Juliet) but then you had the whole stabbing in the side of the female by the male

    then the female transforming into this mysterious and possibly demonic creature and killing him coldly with the ominous...



    The way you described the scene was really good, and also what you did with the woman licking the blood off her fingers; after you described her appearance, I say this with as limited pervertedness as possible, but it greatly added to her sex appeal and was rather seductive at the same time.....in a sadistic way I guess lol.

    Please link me to your chapters once you release them ^^
    No, no it's not going to be a Romeo and Juliet thing *erases romantic balcony scene* lol jk.

    Im planning on writing this whole story throughtout my summer and hopefully make it look really good.
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by Sindy View Post
    No, no it's not going to be a Romeo and Juliet thing *erases romantic balcony scene* lol jk.

    Im planning on writing this whole story throughtout my summer and hopefully make it look really good.
    But I like Romeo and Juliet Shakespear ftw lol.

    The summer is.....in a month 0_o you're going to make me wait a month WHY!
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    But I like Romeo and Juliet Shakespear ftw lol.

    The summer is.....in a month 0_o you're going to make me wait a month WHY!
    actually my summer is in 10 days because i get to leave my high school early. Seniors FTW!!
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by Sindy View Post
    actually my summer is in 10 days because i get to leave my high school early. Seniors FTW!!
    :overjoy:........:mad: I have a damn month and a half left >_<

    But 10 days ftw can't wait for the FF....and I'll be a senior next year ^^
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    cool gory scene, guy deserved it, you don't see a pretty lady picking herbs and stab her. even genin Naruto knew that, when he saw Haku(technically not a lady )
     
         

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    Re: Prologue: Deadly Love

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    :overjoy:........:mad: I have a damn month and a half left >_<

    But 10 days ftw can't wait for the FF....and I'll be a senior next year ^^
    lucky im a junoir....got a3yrs and 28 days untill i gradute... :mad:

    love the story got me on the edge of my seat..pm me when the next chapter is in k?
     
         

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