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    New Generation Page 2.

    Last chapter: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=166883
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    New Generation



    Grandfather


    As Yashi woke up, he remembered last night when his father had returned to the village and the present that his dad gave him. Yashi was sure he was going to use it today for their first mission.

    Yashi got out of bed at 4 in the morning and began to make ready as it was still dark outside and the rain was pouring down like rocks all over the village and you couldn't see the stars from all the clouds in the sky.

    As Yashi was going downstairs he picked up a small item from his dads backpack and he went straight to the door, though he was stopped by his father sitting in the chair right beside the door in the dark.

    Dad: "Are you off already?"

    *He didn't notice his dad, and when he spoke Yashi almost fell over his own feet* Yashi: "Dad... umh.. I was on my way to the training grounds... we were supposed to meet in about 15 minutes..."

    *His father looked at him in the dark* Dad: "It's alright I just wanted to say goodbye before I leave..."

    Yashi looked at his father with a strange look.

    Yashi: "Are you leaving already.... I mean you just got home yesterday..."

    Dad: "I'm sorry but they need me in the Hidden Rock...."

    *Yashi held his backpack while looking at his dad with a sad face* Yashi: "I guess it's okay.... I mean I will see you soon..."

    As Yashi said this he opened the door and started walking while his dad stood in the door looking out the door with a deppressed look while Yashi was walking down the street towards the trainingfield.

    When Yashi was walking down the street, he noticed a shadow on the roof following him, though he believed it was just his imagination. But after a while when he had almost reached the trainingfield, the shadow had approach him and had gotten closer, Yashi was scared.

    Yashi: "Who is it!!"

    As Yashi yelled out, the shadow dissappeared and in a sudden movement, Yashi had been picked up by some mysterious man, and before Yashi knew it, he had been put back down in the trainingfield as a tall man with grey spiky hair was sitting in front of him.

    Yashi: "Granddad... is that you..."

    Kakashi: "Yes... I'm sorry if I scared you... I just wanted to talk to you...."

    As Kakashi was looking at his grandson, he stood up in full height with his old body and his old "Ichi Ichi" book in his hands.

    Kakashi: "As you know... you now a Genin... and your new sensei is a very skilled man whom I taught.... he will drive you to your limit and he will conduct a special test...."

    Yashi looked at his granddad with a strange look on his face.

    Yashi: "What do you mean... a special test..."

    Kakashi: "Now I can't tell you... Mante will explain it to you all when the time comes.... but what I actually came for was to give you these...."

    Kakashi held out his hand, where two old bells were hanging from his hands. Yashi put his hand out to take the bells and bind them to his forhead protector.

    Kakashi: Now I have to go... there is urgent matters.. the Hokage have called for us...."

    As Kakashi dissappeared in a cloud of smoke, the sun was rising over the horizon and the rain had begun to stop as Akira and Ginjiro arrived to see Yashi sitting on a rock looking towards the Hokage's Mansion with a smile on his face.

    Ginjiro: "Why are you smiling... It's freaking raining like hell..."

    Yashi look over towards Akira and smiled to her while he began to talk to Ginjiro.

    Yashi: "Oh.. nothing I just talked to my granddad.."

    Ginjiro: "That doesn't make sense why your smiling... you probably see him everyday..."

    Yashi: "My granddad is... Hatake Kakashi.. Kakashi of the Sharingan... he wanted to give me these...."

    Yashi pulled off the bells from his forhead protector and showed them to Akira and Ginjiro.

    *Yashi told them about his grandfather and showed the bells, Akira looked amazed* Akira: "Wait.. you granddad is Hatake Kakashi... He is so cool!"

    Yashi smiled to Akira while he bound the bells around the forhead protector again, and just when he was about to say something, their sensei arrived in a small white flash.

    Mante: "Sorry... I'm a little late....."

    *Ginjiro looked at their sensei and was very annoyed* Ginjiro: "You don't say...."

    Mante simply looked at Ginjiro once and made him shut his mouth, while he spoke.

    Mante: "Alright students.... our first mission together is a test...."

    As Mante talked to them and began to explain what the test was all about, Hatake Kakashi and Yashi's father was standing in the Hokage's Mansion, both being briefed on their next mission.

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    Hope you liked it :D Next chapter will be awesome.... and please comment and give me feedback :D

    Next chapter will probably be out soon...
     
         
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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    how long are you planning this series ore storie to be
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by kelevra View Post
    how long are you planning this series ore storie to be
    I got no clue... but probably atleast 20 more chapters.... im planning along very long story... 20 is not even going to cut it
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    nice because i dont want it to end, your writing style is really good, but when you write in english you dont use gåseøjne i dont know what it is called in english but instead you use comma. that´s at least what i have been taught.
     
         
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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by kelevra View Post
    nice because i dont want it to end, your writing style is really good, and when you write in english you dont use gåseøjne i dont know what it is called in english but instead you use comma. that´s at least what i have been taught.
    Thanks :D by the way... are you from Denmark, Norway or Sweden?
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Denmark.
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by kelevra View Post
    Denmark.
    LOL i figured... det er jeg også :D

    Well I want as many people to read this as possible :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    I like it keep up the good work I sense that kakashi has a near death and Yashi's father is either going to be a traitor/spy or going to get injured.
    (I think so cause i'm playing CoD now :D)
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by mangekyo byakugan View Post
    I like it keep up the good work I sense that kakashi has a near death and Yashi's father is either going to be a traitor/spy or going to get injured.
    (I think so cause i'm playing CoD now :D)
    LOL idk i will fix some strange twist into the story :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    It keeps getting better and better as I read T_T I cant wait for the next chapter :D lol
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Well anyway good luck on it and when is the next chap out.
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kwalker394 View Post
    It keeps getting better and better as I read T_T I cant wait for the next chapter :D lol
    Not even gotten to the EPIC part yet... Well next chapter will proably be out eithe tomorrow or monday...
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    This is great!
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Miyuki Yukime View Post
    This is great!
    Thanks next one will be out tomorrow or monday :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Man that is just great
    I like like like like like it
    5 like coz I love it

    Kakashi of the sharingan :scorps:
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    i love it dude keep it up
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    hope you enjoyed it.... next chapter might be out today or tomorrow
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    nice chapter
     
         

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    Thanks :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by kelevra View Post
    nice because i dont want it to end, your writing style is really good, but when you write in english you dont use gåseøjne i dont know what it is called in english but instead you use comma. that´s at least what i have been taught.
    Oh. I have always be taught that you use " even though it it english. All the good fanfictions I have read have also used the " when marking speech.
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    so far so good i really like it 10/10 again plus rep keep up the good work let me know when you release the next one
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 2.

    i wish kakashi hatake was my grandfather!! then i would want to be stronger than him too!! i mean kakashi is a very skilled character. and to be stronger than him is an accomplishment in itself.
     
         

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