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    A life saver :1

    It was a rainy day .thunders and gunshot sound were making the whole area thounderous and noisy.jack was sitting near a bolder as blood flowed from his body, under his jacket.jack was shot by 2 bullets, one on left arm and another on his sholder near armpit....the war was still going on between the team ,pirates and the TMDF .they were fighting crossfire jack was the Incharge of TMDF .the war continued for 5 days but the town was totaly turned out into a was zone .by then the TMDF lost.The army of 14 thousands men was getting defeated by the 18 pirate ships each ship had a crew of 200 men.
    After jack noticed that they had already lost the war.as he was incharge of the soldiers. he odered his men to retreat.while the men was retreating and helping each other jack heard a cry of a baby under a broken roof.jack took a look at under the broken roof and show a 6 year old boy carrying a 3 or 2 year old girl .they were using the broken roof as a shelter.The boy was scolding her and making her warm.so jack scolded them both and took them with him.
    Comander: "who are these kids?"
    jack: "i am adopting these ones"
    commander: "what..what about your job?you are a man. how can you take care of such two little kids without a woman?"
    jack: "i retire.i can and i will take care of these two they are my kids now .i adopt them"
    commander: "what..you are our number one and how can you.....ok it's your option."
    jack: "thanks for allowing me...bye"
    to be continued...on 2
     
         
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    Re: A life saver :1

    Another part is coming ...be patients...
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    Nice storyline.
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    that is very well made :D
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    Quote Originally Posted by shinigami331 View Post
    that is very well made :D

    thanks..
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    Awesome :D
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    Good story! I suggest getting someone to spell/grammar check your work. Fine tuning is never bad!
     
         

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    Re: A life saver :1

    Well done nicely written
     
         

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